the dad i have to live with

life has been hard
the pain has been great
i waited for you
but you came to late
ive waited for years
for you to rescue me
but you left me in tears
you gave me up so easily
the others dont care
i took it to heart
they dont think i should share
my words are to harsh for your heart
my words wernt always mean
i loved you uncondisionally
i was always on your team
when we acted like a family
now my pain has gone bitter
and you dont understand
actions spaek louder than words
is that such a big demand





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awesomeaugust This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 6, 2010 at 8:03 pm
I'm sorry about your relationship with your father. I thought this was an excellent poem. I don't know a lot about lyrics, but I can imagine this poem more as song lyrics to a rap or something. The only poinbt of critism I have is that it would improve the poem a lot if you just ran a spell check- if you have time to write such a great poem, you have time to correct a few spelling errors :)
 
hollyhottell replied...
Mar. 7, 2010 at 10:10 am
thank you alot. yes i am a really bad speller. i'll try to work on it
 
CaptainFabulous. said...
Feb. 14, 2010 at 6:03 pm
i used to think the same thing towards my mother
i waited years for her
now i just dont care anymore
great poem
good job
:P
 
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