The Rain

January 28, 2010
By AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.


The rain,
It falls upon my face
Blending with my tears,

The tears,
That fall,
Are for you,

But you will never care,
You will never glance my way,
And see how much I want,
for your smile to be for me,
Instead of someone else,

The storm it rages on,
And yet I feel no cold,
Nor can I ever really feel the sun,

The numbness,
overtakes me,
Just when I think I'm fine,
And so it will be,
That I am right here,
And as you are passing by,

You will not look into my eyes,
For you know what you will see,
The misery,
That is killing me,
And slowly,
Oh so slowly,

My heart is hardening,
So that one day,
When you do want me,
It is you I will not see.


The author's comments:
tragic story boy meets girl, girl falls for boy,boy doesn't know i'm alive.. so i moved on!

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on Jun. 30 2010 at 2:07 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

Thanks! Its nice that people appreciate my poetry. And you can write.... very well! I love your poem A Chance! (:

on Jun. 29 2010 at 12:45 pm
BooBoo95 SILVER, Spencer, West Virginia
8 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
-I'm probably the coolest dork you'll ever meet.
-I'm 99% sure he doesn't like me, it's that 1% that keeps me hanging on.
-The woman came from a mans rib, not from his feet to be walked on,not from his head to be superior, but from the side to be equal, under the arm to be protected, and next to the heart to be loved

Omg I love this poem! You really know how to write :)So emotional makes me want to cry :'( lol....I wish I could write like this

on Jun. 26 2010 at 12:12 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

Thanks!!! Its so great to know that my poetry is appreciated!!!! (:

on Jun. 25 2010 at 11:17 am
MoonlitxRose BRONZE, Albuquerque, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"If at first you don't succeed, try again."

Oh my goodness I love this poem! You made so deep and meaningful! I like how it's so relateable for every girl out there who happens to really like this guy and the guy doesn't notice or just doesn't feel the same way. This was well written! I like how you related the rain with tears that cascade down your face and how the rain blends in with your tears! AWESOME job on writing this! :)

on Jun. 9 2010 at 7:37 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

Thanks!!! And me too. It sucks, but thats how it is! (:

on Jun. 9 2010 at 7:36 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

Thank you so much!!!! (:

melone96 said...
on Jun. 9 2010 at 4:15 pm
melone96, White Sulphur Springs, West Virginia
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LOVE IT!!!

on Jun. 9 2010 at 10:51 am
broadwaylover432 BRONZE, Bryn Athyn, Pennsylvania
4 articles 0 photos 1 comment
 this is great! I've definitely been here before.

on Apr. 11 2010 at 2:26 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

Thanks! But your stuff is really good too!!!!! I loved it!!!!!(:

on Apr. 10 2010 at 2:45 pm
OscarW. DIAMOND, Clarksville, Arkansas
95 articles 0 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Let the beauty we love be what we do. There are hundreds ways to kneel and kiss the ground." - Rumi

Wow. You were right! I really, really love this. Haha, this is so much better than the junk I write. I really enjoyed it.

You remind me a lot of myself. :P

on Mar. 13 2010 at 4:59 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

Thanks, and i will!

Milo! said...
on Mar. 10 2010 at 4:10 pm
I really love this. I really like how everyone can relate to this. I hope you keep writing, because this is great. You should check out some of my stuff. I think you would like it.

on Feb. 23 2010 at 9:48 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

Thank you!

lh42195 SILVER said...
on Feb. 23 2010 at 8:55 pm
lh42195 SILVER, Lemont, Illinois
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This was so good. I really understand it and can relate to it. Good job.

on Feb. 22 2010 at 6:22 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

Oops! I accidently posted my reply to you as a new comment! Sorry, but anyways what it says is: Thank you SO much Papa! It means so much to me that you enjoy my writing! ( And it is SO cool that you made an account just so that you could comment on my poetry! It means a lot to me that you did. I love you!)

on Feb. 22 2010 at 6:18 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

Thank you so much Papa! It means so much to me that you enjoy my writing! (And it is SO cool that you made an account just so that you could comment on my poetry! It means a lot to me that you did. I love you !)

Papa said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 9:01 am
Dear lostinhim

I almost forgot to read your poem. Too much work and my intention was lost. You are truely gifted. You crawl deep inside yourself and pull out the deep thought and emotion that defines your writing. I remember little flower from long ago. Keep it up little flower, do what you love and love what you do. That is a gift from Him. love Papa

Shahed GOLD said...
on Feb. 21 2010 at 9:18 am
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

You're most welcome!

I really do appreciate your work..

Thank you! .. I believe that what comes out of the heart goes straight to the heart! ;)

on Feb. 20 2010 at 11:33 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

Thank you!It means a lot to me when people tell me that they appreciate my work. And by the way, i really liked your gum analogy in your poem " Your Everything" It is a really great peice.

Shahed GOLD said...
on Feb. 19 2010 at 9:25 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

you know when i almost got to the end of this i didnt want it to be over.. this is jst amazing! I mean they way everything you said is jst gr8! .. ur work is gr8!


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