the immortal fault.

February 8, 2010
By TheIdea GOLD, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
TheIdea GOLD, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
10 articles 1 photo 5 comments

Devil find me, look upon my soul and tell me which you cannot;
that its yours.
And angel, you angel, come and see into me and tell why so I am fit to endure that which the devil does embrace.
Answer this, try.
And when its so, take blame;
for it is the immortal fault.
Chide me for the shape of my soul,
but do not condemn me for its existence.

The author's comments:
I just came up with this at a random time as I was thinking about things.
I think this basically says, "Look, the devil cannot take me because my soul is good, yet I'm here on earth enduring the evil. Why? You can blame or punish me for how I shaped my soul, but how can you, when I never even signed up for existence."

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on Feb. 14 2010 at 9:53 am
TheBerkeleyBear BRONZE, Los Altos, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Never put off until tomorrow what you can do the day after tomorrow."

Great thoughts and ideas, but the rhythm was off

on Feb. 13 2010 at 7:52 pm
alayapoetgirl BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Life is hard; but it's harder if you're stupid. -John Wayne

I don't know what to say. This a great! I can sense in your words that you have a passion for poetry. I too love the message it sent me, and I agree. If you get the chance check out my opinion essay on animal rights/vegetarianism

TheIdea GOLD said...
on Feb. 12 2010 at 2:42 pm
TheIdea GOLD, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
10 articles 1 photo 5 comments
ha wow thanks :)

on Feb. 11 2010 at 4:05 pm
zombieattack BRONZE, Winslow, Maine
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Wow, this is so...amazing. Great work, :)

on Feb. 11 2010 at 10:37 am
DallysGrrl PLATINUM, Middlesex, New Jersey
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Sounds very....Shakespeareian. I lik it.

INnaturegirl said...
on Feb. 11 2010 at 9:02 am
i really love the message in this poem :)

great job... keep writing please

on Feb. 10 2010 at 5:49 pm
Kaitbryn PLATINUM, Cushing, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
In economics, hope and faith coexist with great scientific pretension and also a deep desire for respectability. -- John Kenneth Galbraith

Very soon we must all face the decision between what is easy and what is right. -- Albus Dumbledore

Really nice. You should check out my poem Why I write and, if ever oh ever it gets published, Walls.

on Feb. 10 2010 at 5:21 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

I like this.

Keep writing.


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