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Don’t let me drown (Part 1)

January 28, 2010
By Gandalf BRONZE, Muscat, Other
Gandalf BRONZE, Muscat, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"The gray rainy curtains of the world rolls back, and all turns to silver glass" Gandalf


Help me I’m drowning.

Can’t you see I need your help here alone in the cold?
I have an empire full of dirt; I have other treasures like gold,
I’ll give it all to you. Just come and save me! You may think,
How can a drowning man have time to beg for help. Well I’m
not just any man. I have all treasures to give, just save me.
My wealth has many powers, even controls the essence of time,
as the king of the dessert controls the flow of sand. I am no hourglass
but I have my own rights.

Help me I’m drowning!
I was once in your position,
holding the life vest,
was a king,
for my own terms
until my chariot broke,
in the middle of the ocean,
and all my colossal,
Hippocampus drowned.
Just like that.
The waves are coming,
again!

Help me I’m drowning!

I implore you there isn’t much time, it is crowded in this lonely ocean
It gets hard to breathe. Quit just standing there, judging me with
Your eyes, the ocean is off course no place, for a man of treasures
To be lying. The waves now decide the course of my life and
My will is now broken. My treasures now lie at the bottom,
But you can have it all, just throw me the vest! Extend
Your hand, the lightning that cleaves the sea.

Throw me the vest,
Or
Extend a hand,
Bring me to land,
And help me stand.
Too late!!!!
I’m drown-


The author's comments:
This poem is inspired by Seamus Haney's 'for the commander of the Eliza' yet contains its own elements and meanings.

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on Feb. 8 2010 at 2:45 pm
AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
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Favorite Quote:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
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This poem has great flow and insight.

I really enjoyed it.

Lovely poem darling =]

-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-

XxIll tell you Im an orphan after you meet myy familyXx