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Patience Is Not A Virtue

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Maybe the sky will open up
and something will fall out.
I don't know what it would be.
Just a little something to tide me over
until the seas part
and I can walk on water.



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Mimi8 said...
Aug. 16, 2010 at 12:14 pm:
Wow, I love this. All of your poems a pretty short, and I like that. It is right to the point, and the last line is so clear if that makes any sense.
 
Jandee replied...
Aug. 24, 2010 at 2:03 pm :
To be honest... I write short poems because I get bored reading long poems... xD
 
Mimi8 replied...
Aug. 24, 2010 at 3:17 pm :
Yeah, I even get bored reading my poems that are too long! :)
 
Jandee replied...
Aug. 25, 2010 at 12:50 pm :
I'm glad I'm not the only one!
 
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CrystalDE said...
Jul. 4, 2010 at 4:08 pm:
Your short poems are awesome! You write them with some much meaning and things to think about.
 
Jandee replied...
Aug. 24, 2010 at 2:04 pm :

Thank you very much. <3 You're comment has been read and appreciated ten fold.

 

I tend not to think about my poems that much, but comments like yours make me re-read and think some more about them.

 
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Caley said...
Jun. 10, 2010 at 8:15 pm:
oh my gosh, i really love this. At first I was sorta trying to read it from your perspective, like, being really tired & generally stressed, and i got it from that perspective & could relate, but then when i re read it a few times i kept seeing different possibilities & seeing it from different angles. I really love it. Short, sweet, to the point, and yet it's so multilayered in its simplicity. Like, you could take it as the other ppl commented on it, as "it's the little things,"&nbs... (more »)
 
Jandee replied...
Jun. 12, 2010 at 2:50 pm :
Thank you very much for your kind words. I didn't realize that it could be taken from a religious stand point, but now I see it. I'm not a very religious person, so I didn't even think of that. I suppose I may have with the seasing parting, but it was my subconscious. I think I was going for waiting for something big to happen and being impatient for it, so I was asking to just come across something that would make the wait seem shorter.
 
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DreamWriter15 said...
Jun. 2, 2010 at 5:53 pm:
Love it. :)
 
Jandee replied...
Aug. 24, 2010 at 2:04 pm :
Thank you!
 
DreamWriter15 replied...
Aug. 25, 2010 at 10:53 pm :
You're quite welcome. :-)
 
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cupcakesNbrownies97 said...
May 9, 2010 at 3:13 pm:
I really like that idea of something falling out of the sky <3 JK I know what you mean. The littler things in life that keep us going until we find that one thing that is different for everyone.
 
Jandee replied...
Jun. 10, 2010 at 2:58 pm :
That's exactly what I was going for. Thank you so much.
 
MadAsAHatter... replied...
Jun. 16, 2010 at 12:40 pm :
It's short and sweet, but full of emotion, and passion.
 
Jandee replied...
Aug. 24, 2010 at 2:04 pm :

Hmm... passion?

 

Thank you very much.

 
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