If I Am

January 20, 2010
If I am the sun of your day,
you are the moon of my night.

If I am the pillow beneath your head,
you are the blanket that covers me.

If I am the air you breathe,
you are the blood in my veins.

If I am the home you come to,
you are the town I grew up in.

If I am the fire that burns,
you are the water that soothes.

If I am the lightning that strikes,
you are the thunder that roars.

If I am the love of your existance,
you are mine.

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CobyHorseLove said...
May 27, 2010 at 1:29 pm
I like IT SO MUCH!! Check out my photos and storys thanx new Friend
Secret_Love_Tells replied...
Jun. 7, 2010 at 9:08 am
will do. Thanks.
jonas_chick899 said...
May 6, 2010 at 5:02 pm
:DDD i love it!!! thats a really cute poem. good job!!
Secret_Love_Tells replied...
Jun. 7, 2010 at 9:08 am
Thank you! This was one of the first poems I ever wrote... I think I've gotten a little better... lol.
DarkAngelEmotional said...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 1:02 pm
I love it! Its very expressive. I loved when you said "If iam the sun of your day your the moon of my night. Awsomly romantic. ^^
Secret_Love_Tells replied...
Jun. 7, 2010 at 9:11 am
lol thanks... *blushes* I wrote it for an old crush...
MyFairyTaleEnding said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 4:08 pm
This is amazing!!!! I love it! It's so touching and true. You really expressed yourself. I feel like a minor compared to this! AMAZING!!!!
Chickadee replied...
Feb. 25, 2010 at 11:25 am
I'm just a minor myself hun. Lol. Thanks a lot.
Fayrouz This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 30, 2010 at 4:55 pm
WOAH CHICKADEE! i am speechless! i have to say that i am shocked that this was not published at all! it has a beautiful message and the striking comparisions are lovely! i do have to admit that the last two lines don't live up to the rest of the poem and i don't think they wrap it up pretty well, but i do understand it. this is very good! keep writing cause that's the only way to get better :)
Chickadee replied...
Jan. 31, 2010 at 11:17 am
I didn't know how to end it. I just sort of figured that it would be a difference that stood out a little.
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