No One Cares

January 20, 2010
No one cares

I've heard the silence,

I've felt the pain,

And I've shed the tears.

But does anyone see?

Does anyone hear?

Can anyone help?

My existence seems less and less significant,

Every breath i take does not sustain as it used to,

The words i try to speak are carried off into the wind, before it reaches their ears.

No one reaches out,

No one tries to help,

No one can see how deeply i suffer

For no one truly cares.

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sleeplessdreamer said...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 7:08 pm

Not going to lie, your poem made me depressed. :( Still great though. And perhaps its great because it makes me sad. THat you reached my heart.

Um, guess what??? Minor critique!!! One long line in the second to last stanza. Awkward. Karate chop that thing in half and you'll be on your way.

Jynxx replied...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 8:15 pm
thanks for commenting! and sorry about depressing you =)
--LoveHappens-- said...
Apr. 28, 2010 at 6:15 pm
wow that is deep I love the writing and it is very mysterious and moving. Great job please check out my work thanks!!!
Jynxx replied...
May 11, 2010 at 5:01 pm
okay! and thanks!
SwordGirl said...
Feb. 2, 2010 at 6:49 pm
Wow! That's amazing! A lot of what I write is free verse too. (I don't think that it has been posted yet)
Pensivegurl replied...
Feb. 3, 2010 at 4:54 pm
Thanks! I'll have to check it out when it is. >.<
Jatavion replied...
Mar. 5, 2010 at 5:29 pm
I would have to say that there is at least one that cares :)
Very interesting poem
Pensive?Gurl replied...
Mar. 7, 2010 at 3:38 pm
thanks, jata.
Healing_Angel This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Dec. 14, 2010 at 6:02 pm
I like this. It's well written. You have talent and it shows.
...PensiveGurl... replied...
Dec. 17, 2010 at 7:09 pm
why thank you Healing_Angel!
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