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Can You...?

the sun is shining?
can you see it?
can you feel it?
i can not,
my life is chaos,
a storm not to be underestimated.
The rain begins to pour,
tears from the orbs that are my soul,
the pain burns bright in my eyes.
thunder rumbles across te skies,
my body is shaking.
can you see it?
can you feel it?
I can not,
my life is ending.
standing on the cliff's edge,
the wind blows weakly,
i can scarcely breathe.
Day turns suddenly to night,
there is no moon,
i close my eyes.
can you see it?
can you feel it?
Lightning cracks,
the planet engulfed in flames,
my heart is shattered.
the rain lets up,
my tears fall silently now.
the clouds break,
the sun leaks out false happiness,
in the distance,
coming closer...
the storm waits.
" I love you."
Lightning cracks,
thunder rumbles.
Rain pours,
and my heart shatters.
Again...
Please...let me go.
give me peace with my last breath,
I love YOU.
The storm dies,
he's left with the corpse of the one he loved.
Now he's got a storm of his own,
and the cycle repeats itself.

P.S. I'd give up forever to hold you.




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BlueSunset said...
Aug. 26, 2012 at 5:37 pm:
Amazed! :D
 
ShelbyLalaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 27, 2012 at 7:31 am :
Thanks Blue :D
 
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KyotoLoveThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 25, 2011 at 11:57 am:
thanks guys!!(:
 
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elmosoreo said...
Apr. 13, 2011 at 10:33 am:
Love it!! :)
 
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Beachgirl1 said...
Apr. 13, 2011 at 9:46 am:
this is beautiful! it makes me want to cry, I loved it. 
 
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josiebelle said...
Jun. 1, 2010 at 7:45 am:
i liked the imagery you used it worked really well as a metaphor and i think everyone has been head over heels for a guy who didnt know it at some stage!!
 
ShelbyLalaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 5, 2012 at 10:39 am :
thank you so much (:
 
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jonas_chic899 said...
May 7, 2010 at 7:54 am:
ooh ur good. that was an awesome poem. good voicee
 
ShelbyLalaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 5, 2012 at 10:38 am :
thank you! sorry took so long to reply but i havnt been on in ages
 
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gymnast101 said...
Feb. 2, 2010 at 5:10 pm:
Wow! Very good!
 
perceptive_soulThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 10, 2010 at 3:12 pm :
thanks! pretty pathetic tho, that almost all of these are for this guy Brandon. and he doesnt even know it...
 
gymnast101 replied...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 9:32 am :
HaHa. It doesn't matter, it's still really good
 
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