January 11, 2010
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Thunder crash,
Lightening flash,
Iluminates the skies.
Comstant beat of the rain,
Wistling wind hollowing through the trees.
Clouds clash and lightening flash,
House lights flicker: tink, tink.
My heart pounds in my ears: boo boom, boo boom.

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Autumn126 said...
Jan. 25, 2010 at 5:47 pm
i am terribly sorry for the spelling mistakes. i was not expecting this piece to get online. it was just a school assignment
rachelyanggggggg said...
Jan. 25, 2010 at 12:58 am
Wow I really like the rhythm of the first two lines! drew me in :)
Autumn126 replied...
Jan. 25, 2010 at 5:42 pm
thank you :)
Powd3er said...
Jan. 22, 2010 at 2:53 pm
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
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Autumn126 replied...
Jan. 23, 2010 at 11:16 am
thanks for your words :) they mean alot. i actually wasn't expecting this peice to get on the internet so thats why there are spelling mistakes. i am definitly not pleased with them but i can't change them. oh well, but i'm glad that you liked it :)
CountryGothic said...
Jan. 22, 2010 at 6:40 am
I like the poem, it's pretty good, but could be more.
Autumn126 replied...
Jan. 23, 2010 at 11:20 am
what would you like to see more of in the poem?
CountryGothic replied...
Jan. 24, 2010 at 7:50 pm
Well, it is mostly descriptive in short sparks. It could flow a little bit better. But even so, it's rather good.
MCGlowstick said...
Jan. 21, 2010 at 12:57 pm
suspenseful fast action fun descriptives
Autumn126 replied...
Jan. 23, 2010 at 11:20 am
thank you :)
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