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No phoenix tears, nor all my fears,
Could save you, dear, tonight.
The skies turn black and I turn my back
Even farther from where it was faced.
The green blade shot out and you crumple down,
To the withered body you are today.
The crowd gathers, and the water wells up in my eyes,
But the clamor of thunder overpowers my cries.
I huddle over your empty body, Ginny Weasely at my side,
I shout and scream and hope and dream
That you’ll open your eyes.
We raise our tarried wands to ye,
Dumbledore, Albus, Greatest The.



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foxydramallamaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 21, 2013 at 4:00 pm:
Love this!! Can you look at my fanfiction poetry for The Fault in Our Stars?
 
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foxydramallamaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 21, 2013 at 3:45 pm:
Amazing!!! Nice flow and good diction.
 
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secretlypoetic said...
Apr. 16, 2011 at 9:30 pm:
great poem! It really captures the moment. As a poetry fanatic, I think you should try free verse, without any rhyme schemes, but in this poem there was only one part that was not flowy like the rest that was the "The skies turn black and I turn my back
Even farther from where it was faced" it just sounded wierd in the poem
 
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darkvisions said...
May 25, 2010 at 4:04 pm:
This is purely amazing. I was crying uncontrolably when I read the book, every single time...reading this brought back that reaction.
 
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Skeezics said...
Apr. 6, 2010 at 9:42 pm:
I love this. It is awesome. And no you aren't the only "lunatic who has a massive breakdown when a character dies." I do too.
 
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WiseGirl said...
Mar. 30, 2010 at 8:24 pm:
I LOVE it!! I cried when I read the book!
 
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Coran said...
Mar. 17, 2010 at 5:44 pm:
Wow, thats like when I first read the book... I couldn't stop crying... It was the same way with Sirius...Anyways, awesome poem!
 
JonasLover89 replied...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 3:10 pm :
Thank you so much! It's nice to know I'm not the only lunatic who has massive breakdowns whenever a character dies.
 
Ally25 replied...
Mar. 30, 2010 at 5:08 pm :

Good to know!! I cryed so hard when people died in those books. Even when I was in class wich was TOTALY embarising ..but I got away with it.

Yeah i totaly liked your poem. It just captures the loss.

 
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