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Seeds of the Past

I look back into my past
And I see tears and bad ideas
Those angers I held inside of me
Was like a seed

You plant it and at first
It’s so
Small

Yet somehow it grew
Into a tree bearing poison fruit
Like that poison apple
In Snow White

Those fruits were my ideas

At first they seemed like such good ideas
Until
They nearly killed me

But then, one day
Someone came
They offered to help me chop down my tree

It wasn’t easy because
I had become so attached to that tree
I loved that tree
Guarded it for a while even

But one day I realized
How poisonous those fruits were
How ugly and distorted
That tree was

And I chopped it down




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Neytiri said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 10:07 am:
AMAZING!!! Ilove it!! Great job!! It's so beautiful and you've presented it excellently!!!xxx
 
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TwasBrilling said...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 8:41 pm:
This is my favorite of all your poems..I like the metaphor, and how abruptly it ends!
 
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ams98 said...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 8:36 pm:
i love how you wrote this...it just flows and has beautiful metaphors:) Great job
 
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.Izzy.This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 9:18 pm:
I love this metaphor! I'm a fan of your poetry now :D
 
ColorfulExpectations replied...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 9:21 pm :
Haha, thank you very much! :)
 
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freeflow23This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 2:35 pm:
Wow! This was so relatable for me. I like your style. Perfect metaphor.
 
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suckerpunch234 said...
Aug. 31, 2010 at 3:50 pm:

You really like to ponder on you childhood don't you? I read your forums.  Great piece I really liked it.

 

P.S. Could you read a few of my articles? I'd appreciate if you commented too?

 
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FlyWithMe_899 said...
Jul. 19, 2010 at 6:11 pm:
that was a really awesome metaphor :DD i applaud!! very nicely done!!
 
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a.m.f said...
Jul. 19, 2010 at 1:32 am:
I like your tree metaphor. This is the kind of poem you don't see often anymore; you know, it makes you think.  i like it. you should post more work; it will help you get noticed more. i commented on your forum, too, but in case you don't see it, can you please comment and rate my memoir "Gotta Love Support"? Thanks!
 
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EveMarie said...
Jul. 18, 2010 at 1:40 pm:
awesome this is great
 
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iDogrocker said...
Jul. 17, 2010 at 7:39 pm:
I love the tree analogy. I really connected with it. 
 
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babigerl1194 said...
Jul. 13, 2010 at 4:11 pm:
So i saw your blog thingy. First off maybe if you wrote more you'd get more you know? and if you comment more that alos puts you out there. oh yea and i agree it was raw and emotional. good jobs. continue the writing. :) ps plz return the favor... withthe comments. lol
 
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gymbabe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 12:39 pm:
This was amazing, very raw and emotional, well-described, and great metaphor.  Excellent job.
 
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aub13zzz said...
Jul. 4, 2010 at 11:12 am:
wow i loved it! the metaphor of the tree to whatever pain you had in the past was great! the story was great... and i just loved it!!!
 
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metalcor3 said...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 4:14 pm:

Awesome!!

just needs some rhythm in it..

nice :)

 
mandapanda9736This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 3, 2010 at 2:46 pm :
this is awesome! I feel like you should add something about roots in there, I don't really know why, it just kinda popped into my head. I love the story you tell, its so alive!
 
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