A Flower For Rachel

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An eye looks up and waters the flower
who knew she had this much power
this rose has no thorns
but it keeps on
growing

Each tear, falling with a message
a purpose
helps the seed grow
and as each petal falls down
a stronger layer grows, it fills the bottom

Hope and courage are the eyes
bravery and passion color each eye
in order to help, she knows she will die
but this isn't goodbye

A flower for Rachel
too young to stop growing
still young, never stopped knowing
ages before her day
years before her age

Life's so precious
moments,
we have so few,
but hers keeps shinning through.
Like a beam of light
warms your neck,
take hold of it,
and pass it to the next.





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princessness_16 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 26, 2010 at 7:41 am
wow. this is amazing. i love this poem, its so powerful. you did a great job with creating an image (of the rose). It's great. keep writing :)
 
Pensivegurl said...
Feb. 1, 2010 at 7:36 pm
Wow! this is really deep! I'm impressed! o.o
 
Shannon_ said...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 4:00 pm
oh my! this is great, very touching and special... i thank u for writing so moving!
 
Emaka said...
Jan. 16, 2010 at 2:57 am
=) It's really good. I like the lines "too young to stop growing; still young never stopped knowing"
 
bballstar12 said...
Jan. 14, 2010 at 7:25 pm
not bad for your first submission
 
xandy55 said...
Jan. 13, 2010 at 11:32 pm
nice message! check out my poems!
 
allForYOU said...
Jan. 13, 2010 at 11:31 pm
The first two stanza aren't very good, but the rest are not that bad.
 
Abbie365 said...
Jan. 13, 2010 at 10:54 pm
It's a little choppy in the beginning, but it flows more smoothly at the end. Your punctuation is odd, but maybe you're like me and use it when you want for effect.
You should submit some more poems!
 
EmC725 replied...
Jan. 13, 2010 at 10:56 pm
Thank you for your feedback!
Yeah, this poem is a few years old, and so I see that it is choppy in some places.
 
CRASHBROWN said...
Jan. 13, 2010 at 10:45 pm
Nice Work!
 
SimplyNow55 said...
Jan. 13, 2010 at 3:04 pm
Great Job!
 
onMymind64 said...
Jan. 13, 2010 at 2:51 pm
I have heard of this girl before. What happened to her was very sad. Great job though, and I like your message!
 
Dancer9113 said...
Jan. 13, 2010 at 1:50 pm
This poem was full of emotion and well thought out. Great Job!! It remindes me of a book I read. It is also about a girl who was killed in the shootings.
 
CRASHBROWN said...
Jan. 12, 2010 at 10:00 pm
love it! u r very talented! great poem and emotional subject! love ya Elena!!!! u r the best!!!!
 
iugirl13 said...
Jan. 12, 2010 at 9:43 pm
this is such a great poem! very heartfelt and emotional.... talented writing
 
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