December 11, 2009
Sporatic moments of happiness,
Have gone away.
Now,I know I'm always okay.
No more holding on to hope,
I know it's always there.
Myself is in my own hands,
To cherish and take care.
I search deep within my soul,
To find what i love most.
No more moping around,
Like a long-gone, life-lost ghost.
It's time to pick up the slack,
On this story I call life.
Love, laugh, learn...
I just might.

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Miseltoe said...
Apr. 10, 2010 at 2:28 pm
hi i really like your work its deep has a nice rythm n sounds real.
inspir3d This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 27, 2010 at 1:13 pm

this is great!! :) 

however, there's a couple phrases that throw off ur rhythm (esp "moping around"). i would rephrase...but great job!!

hollyhottell said...
Feb. 15, 2010 at 8:40 pm
your really good!!!!!!! your poems make me happy!! makes me want to go out theres and have hope even things dont look so bright
coyne3 said...
Feb. 14, 2010 at 10:07 pm
this is cool it almost reads like a conversation i really like the ending sorta optimistic
KaitE said...
Feb. 5, 2010 at 8:00 am
Very good the ryming was good not too dr sues just enough to give it a good rythm.
CaptainFabulous. replied...
Feb. 5, 2010 at 12:29 pm
thank you !!
TheseBrownEyes said...
Jan. 31, 2010 at 11:26 am
I liked this! It had mystery and allure. Nice job.
CaptainFabulous. replied...
Feb. 3, 2010 at 6:27 pm
thank you i love getting comments :DDD
Lydia_the_dwarf This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 28, 2010 at 5:25 pm
LOVE the last night. Really fab! Nice word choice!
CaptainFabulous. replied...
Jan. 28, 2010 at 5:42 pm
thank you !!
sarahbug16 said...
Jan. 27, 2010 at 9:34 pm
im still trying to figure out wut this is about
sarahbug16 said...
Jan. 23, 2010 at 2:59 pm
hhhhmmmm, makes me wonder.....
thanks for looking at my poems......
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