Nothing Can Replace You

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The moon swings way up so high.
The stars hungs far above the moon in all its brightness.
The sun burns with so much light.
Just float on a fluffly cloud,
not caring a thing about the world.

I ride upon the stars of shooting.
I swim in the endless galaxies.
I slide on the rings of saturn.
I walk with the universe in its eternity.
I watch the stars twinkling across a desert of black

I return back to this place because in all the worlds, galaxies, and universe. No other place has what this place does.
What this place holds is my friend.
That friend is not just any ol' friend.
It is my True friend
The name of that friend is

Pica





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windryder said...
Aug. 23, 2010 at 12:43 pm
sounds like she is more than a "friend". but i like the poem.
 
Powd3er said...
Jan. 14, 2010 at 11:46 am
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
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ShernayB. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 13, 2010 at 5:01 am
This poem is beautiful. I love the imagery, it is very powerful imagery. I pictured myself in this place as i was reading this. Good job.
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Alice B. said...
Jan. 9, 2010 at 5:21 pm
LostJacket,
In your poem, Nothing Can Replace You, there is a strong use of imagery from the, “sun burns with so much light,” to “stars twinkling across a desert of black.” This is a very unique way of remembering your friend. If you are considering revising your poem you might want to change the wording of the poem, for example, “change stars of shooting” to shooting stars. It just sounds a little awkward the way it is now. You also might want to ... (more »)
 
BlackMoonWhiteSky This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 8, 2010 at 9:44 am
It has dreamlike quality.
 
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