Some Common Sense

November 14, 2009
By arimas SILVER, Columbia, South Carolina
arimas SILVER, Columbia, South Carolina
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a murder, a tragedy
it's become everyday
we mourn and cry
then move on with our lives

an innocent life taken
so someone
can get the drugs
they're so addicted to

a person killed
so some gang member can say
i've dominated you
i'm better than you

but they're not better
no human is better than the next
we're all the same
and we're all in this together

and the sooner we realize this
the better off we'll all be
the better the world will become
and the stronger we'll be united

we don't have to take murder
rape, or some other tragedy
as something that happens everyday
change it


The author's comments:
I know about the capitalization, i made it that way. but, i really want to know what people think about this, because it may be one of the deepest thing I've ever written.

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Shahed GOLD said...
on May. 17 2010 at 9:04 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

well you're welcome! and if this is how you want it then it's really nice, Im glad you didnt take my comment personal lol like some other people do, but yea good job!

arimas SILVER said...
on May. 17 2010 at 4:52 pm
arimas SILVER, Columbia, South Carolina
9 articles 0 photos 35 comments
thanksss!! haha, i love getting positive feedback. makes me happpppyy!! i think i might actually have another version of this sommeeewheeerrreee... or either this is the new one.... well. either way, i think this one has been reworked. once.

Shahed GOLD said...
on May. 8 2010 at 9:33 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

I like this! it talks about everyday life at first, and I agree, we are all equal NO ONE is better than anyone else! Its deep, but for me, sometimes I write things and rework them, months after becuase I think they'll make more sense or sound better some how, so at first try to rework it, but I really like it, its my fav. from all your work that I've read so far :)


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