An hourglass dropping time softly by the moment
it envelops the ground
drenching the world in a blank canvas
it envelops the ground
drenching the world in a blank canvas
This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.
A Snowy Morning
AbbyNormal
I usually don't like poetry, but I LOVED this. Wow. The description is just amazing and so simple (an hourglass = snow, brilliant). I wish I'd thought of it!
One thing I'm curious about, though, is your use of the word drenching. It doesn't seem to fit the idea of snow, but maybe I missed something?
I love your form. Keep writing :)
Thank you!
I agree that the word drenching is a little odd when talking about snow but thats why I liked it! I don't think people usually would associate the two words, so I think its cool to use two words that don't usually go together normally :)
Egyptiangirl13WOw! you rock-no wonder you're in the magazine! What was your inspiration?
thanks so much! I had to write a poem about nature in a creative writing class so I chose snow as the topic. I'm glad you liked it! :)
ur so welcome-stop by my page when my poems get posted-i think that u'll like them
ChristopherKWow! This is great stuff. It's short but fantastic. Keep it up!
thanks a lot :)
i checked out some of your stuff and i love it!
i checked out some of your stuff and i love it!
brianjWoah, deep! I love the picture you have with the snowy morning (not that I stole that from the title, or anything...) and the way it's so short, but says so much. I love it! :)
BradP27This is awesome...I love the hourglass metaphor/imagery. Very vivid. Wish you had more stuff posted here...
thanks!
im working on some other stuff and i may post it soon
im working on some other stuff and i may post it soon
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