Eternal Seams

November 1, 2009
By calephchad BRONZE, Guin, Alabama
calephchad BRONZE, Guin, Alabama
4 articles 0 photos 84 comments

I...
faded away
(that lone lost day)

I...
turned to my past
(nothing to say)

I...
heard my faint name
(discretely pained)

I...
wallowed estranged
(scattered astray)

I...
clinged to my dreams
(eternal seams)

I...
wished to redeem...



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dya.o PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 10 2012 at 7:56 pm
dya.o PLATINUM, Milton, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
“If consensus is overrated, I think balance is, too.
I have no interest in living a balanced life.
I want a life of adventure.” | Chris Guillebeau

Definitely a favorite of mine now. I hope that you write more poetry because I am now in love with your work. Lol:) Checkout some of my work sometime?

HaHmAh12 GOLD said...
on Apr. 11 2010 at 9:48 pm
HaHmAh12 GOLD, Toledo, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"At the age of six I wanted to be a cook. At seven I wanted to be Napoleon. And my ambition has been growing steadily ever since." ~Salvador Dali

ok....the structure of this is so creative, and the feeling is really cool and intense. love love love love

on Mar. 10 2010 at 8:58 pm
calephchad BRONZE, Guin, Alabama
4 articles 0 photos 84 comments
Thank you! I would really appreciate if you could give me some more feedback on my other work. Comments like these just really boost my confidence. Thank you!

on Mar. 10 2010 at 5:06 pm
CletusTheCool GOLD, Bolingbrook, Illinois
12 articles 6 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Great wisdom always encounters violent opposition from mediocre minds.."
"Evil is always unspectacular. Evil sits at our table. Evil eats our food."

This poem is really good. It usually takes more words to describe things clearly. In this case, I think, the use of less words makes it better. good work.

on Mar. 5 2010 at 2:41 pm
calephchad BRONZE, Guin, Alabama
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Thanks!...

on Feb. 25 2010 at 10:50 pm
PoetLaureate07 PLATINUM, Aberdeen, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing..

AWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Feb. 9 2010 at 2:31 pm
calephchad BRONZE, Guin, Alabama
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Thank you, thank you, thank you. !

on Feb. 4 2010 at 5:48 pm
CuteCourt101 SILVER, Newark, Delaware
9 articles 1 photo 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Acting like someone else is a waste of who you are!" ~Unknown

I love this poem .. your poems are amazing! They are really great!!

on Feb. 4 2010 at 11:12 am
Peace182 BRONZE, Philadelphia, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Everyone has a dream, but its up to you to make that dream a reality. Life is to short not to.

your a great writer =)

on Jan. 29 2010 at 9:40 am
MissFaber SILVER, Wayne, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Nothing Less.

i love this type of poetry, and writing in general. totally random yet so specific, and extremely insightful. good job :)

on Jan. 16 2010 at 9:27 pm
calephchad BRONZE, Guin, Alabama
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Thank you!

on Jan. 15 2010 at 9:24 pm
LoveBam14 BRONZE, Bakersfield, California
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Favorite Quote:
If you stand for nothing, you'll fall for anything.

I Love How You Write, It Makes You Think :)

on Jan. 12 2010 at 9:24 pm
japsystarr SILVER, Pierre Part, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
holy shnikeys

i love it =):

5*s.....most definately original...i wish my poems were as original as yours(LUCKEEEE)

on Nov. 22 2009 at 10:39 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Wow! This is great. I loved it. The flow of it sounds like...a song. Good job!

If you have time, will you please check out my work. Comment and rate please? Thanks!

on Nov. 21 2009 at 11:18 am
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

This is great! Love the form of it, it's so original! Beautiful.

on Nov. 20 2009 at 10:20 am
4everluvjc BRONZE, Plantation, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
nothing is impossible with God! Try him and you'll see :)

Wow. I really liked this! You're a great poet.

belle GOLD said...
on Nov. 19 2009 at 8:37 am
belle GOLD, Easley, South Carolina
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you are a really great writer

on Nov. 18 2009 at 2:54 pm
AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
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Favorite Quote:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-
XxIll tell you Im an orphan after you meet myy familyXx

Hey <br />
I told you I would Comment ^.^ <br />
I rele lyke the format of the poem <br />
its great =p<br />
I really enjoyed it.<br />
Lovely poem darling =]<br />
XxThe Whole Time You Were Talking I Didnt Hear A Single Word You Said B/C Th3 Whole Time You Were Talking I Was Picturing You DeadXx

beth.j.r said...
on Nov. 17 2009 at 7:27 pm
I was the one who accidentally gave this a one star review. Sorry, I meant four stars. This poem gave me a deep feeling of hopelessness and fear of being lost forever. Is that what you were after? It's channeling Poe, for sure..."The Bells" Is that what his poem, similar to this is called?

on Nov. 17 2009 at 6:04 pm
calephchad BRONZE, Guin, Alabama
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Thank you so much. You're more than welcome. :)


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