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The Moon and the Girl

There is a little girl
on a boat to nowhere
She sails the long nights
and disappears during the day
The little girl
sings a lovely song
"When the day
goes to sleep
the moon takes
it's place
When the Sun
goes to sleep
I come out to play
With my dear
friend, the Moon,
we'll go to bed
not soon, not soon
but stay up
and play all
night but not
day."




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Inkspired said...
Nov. 22, 2009 at 4:58 pm:
This is really original, I love the girl's song, and the beginning, but I think it ends rather abruptly. Perhaps you could add a little more to the end? Otherwise, it's beautiful!
 
FortuitousA replied...
Nov. 23, 2009 at 12:00 am :
Thank you for all your feedback. It's nice to have other people's opinions because they can be very beneficial to you. I'll take your advice into consideration. :]
 
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