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An Orchestra

I hate music
She yells. He yells louder.
That is the music
Which seeps through my walls.

Doors slam,
A car starts.
The blade dances
Over porcelain skin

At six in the morning,
Three in the afternoon,
Ten at night
My music plays loud.

His fist makes contact,
She yelps in pain.
The blade dances
Over porcelain skin
In a red river of tears.



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WikdChick said...
Jan. 4, 2011 at 1:39 pm:
Just how I like my poems, darkly beautiful. meaningful
 
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MelanieLouise This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 29, 2010 at 2:34 pm:
really great poem :) keep writing, Mel. Check out my stuff if you would like
 
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found_my_dream(: This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 16, 2010 at 5:57 pm:
OMGGG! I loved this(: its very insightful and it blew me away.
also, thank you for checking out my stuff too, i acually put up alot better stuff but it hasn't been acceptted yet :/
 
phoenix48 replied...
May 8, 2010 at 7:10 pm :
yea i posted a new poem too but its still pending :(, but thanks for the compliment and i really loved ur poems
 
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Metal_Mulisha said...
Feb. 14, 2010 at 9:43 pm:
I agree with the others. Nice poem.
 
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Alisha62293 said...
Feb. 3, 2010 at 4:23 pm:
I really like this poem. it has a nice flow to it =D
 
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lily1411 said...
Feb. 3, 2010 at 4:12 pm:
i really like this one, very raw and gets the whole point across
 
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rhodaboett This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 1, 2009 at 10:59 pm:
I really like this poem. It has so much emotion. I especially like the lines The blade dances/Over poercelain skin. I also like the repetition which brings emphasis to the theme of the poem
 
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Inkspired said...
Nov. 1, 2009 at 4:07 pm:
This is really great, it paints a picture really well. I love how you use repetition to get your point across!
 
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Venus Monday said...
Oct. 31, 2009 at 7:53 pm:
I like this, it has feeling and a story to it.
 
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lovehate29 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 31, 2009 at 1:39 pm:
This is really pretty. This reminds me of the article I have to do in journalism class; about domestic violence.
 
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rosecrusher said...
Oct. 30, 2009 at 10:36 am:
This is sad but it opens my eyes. I see what you are going through and my heart pittys for you. Poems are an excelent way to express your self and by you writing this poem you express your self very clearly.
 
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egarrison said...
Oct. 29, 2009 at 7:48 pm:
This poem really paints a picture in my head on how you feel about this and what your experiencing. This is a great peice of work that i am sure alot of people can relate to. I like how you named all the times that it has happened and exactly what it sounds like to you. I like how you compared this to music and how you hate it.
 
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alex9426 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 29, 2009 at 4:44 pm:
this is a very powerful and emotional poem. but PLEASE, if something like this is going on, you need to get to a safe place.
 
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alfavetta said...
Oct. 29, 2009 at 12:52 pm:
This poem is so awesome....I can really hear and feel what you are trying to so. Do not change it!
 
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roxamania96 said...
Oct. 28, 2009 at 3:41 pm:
I don't think I can even explain how beautiful this poem is. It's perfect.
 
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Paig3Cagl3 said...
Oct. 28, 2009 at 11:18 am:
This is a beautiful poem!!! So many kids have parents that are in abusive relationships. i myself had to deal with many. cutting yourself is a resort that many teens are looking toward. This is a beautiful description of a cutters inner emotions and writings like tthis one are the ones that will open manys eyes toward this epidimic that is hitting are nation so quietly.
 
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