The Victory

October 22, 2009
By Britney Wells BRONZE, Massena, New York
Britney Wells BRONZE, Massena, New York
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The Victory
I remember…
When I won
The blue
On the racetrack,
Horses are anxiously
Dancing in the starting gates.
My muscles throb
With anticipation,
The beasts storm out
Head to head,
Adrenalin bursts through my veins
As we race with
Fierce competition,
I remember…
My mount, Red Badge,
Giving it his all.
I look ahead into the straightaway
With all his power
Around the turn,
We fall behind
As thoroughbreds run past,
There it was,
I spot the inside lane,
Maneuvering around

We squeeze in,
My heart pounds.
Run Badge…
Just run.
Out of no where
This powerful energy
Pulls us up,
Stride… Stride…
We burst through
the finish line as
the crowd roars

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Fryeem said...
on Oct. 28 2009 at 6:29 pm
What I loved about your peice was the fluency. I was never lost once. Also, I ride horses as well and even though I have never raced I felt a connection. The rising action was amazing! I found myself saying, "Is she going to make it, will they win?" Another part I liked was your word choices like, "the beats storm out" and "maneuvering around". This is the best poem I have ever read on TeenInk. I feel that you should write a sequel on moving into the championships or even another race. Outstanding work, keep it up!


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