The First Time I Saw You

October 22, 2009
By mr.writesalot BRONZE, Virginia
mr.writesalot BRONZE, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"You have to be able to laugh at yourself. That's what I tell Asian people all the time." - Sarah Silverman.

The first time I saw you I didn’t know what to say,
The first time I saw you my mind went away,
My heart skipped a beat,
And my eyes rolled defeat,
As the tears came pouring down,
I looked like a clown,
Yet I didn’t care,
I let them stare,
I stayed with you for so long,
I questioned myself, “Where did it all go wrong?”
And as I left I knew,
That it would the first and last time I’d see you
You’re gone now, but you’re in my heart
Your memory, it’s like a work of art
I can still remember the first time I saw you.

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This article has 4 comments.

on Nov. 2 2009 at 3:58 pm
JordanNicole SILVER, Spartanburg, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
\"Love is strange, powerful, and sneaky. You won\'t know it until you find it...and when you have it, never let it go!\" ~JordanNicole

I really like this poem. It reminds me of the way I felt and still feel about my best friend

on Nov. 2 2009 at 10:48 am
this is well written and is a very good poem (:

on Oct. 30 2009 at 11:28 pm
cassandra_2011 PLATINUM, North Pole, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"Give in to love, or live in fear."

Wow this is really good, I suck at writing couplets haha the only thing I'd change is the clown line, kinda a cheesy line. The rest is very well written, thought out, it sets the image in one's head, and tells an overall great story. Good job. =)

akrr2011 said...
on Oct. 29 2009 at 9:19 am
akrr2011, Hamersville, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Skin is beautiful so dont ruin it with scars because life isnt as beautiful for once life becomes beautiful to you again your skin wont be so beautiful anymore"

This reminds me of my Ex.

This is lovely writing,ive reread it 3 times now.

Thank you,Keep writing.


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