October 21, 2009
Stolen look pass the time.
Cheeks flaring.
A silent plea,
Waiting for him
To talk.
How could he put a veil
Over what he felt?
How could she adore him,
When all he did was lie?
Priceless words wander.
She fights in the battle of love.
But does he?

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EdytD said...
Nov. 6, 2009 at 4:20 pm
I like the idea here, and the emotion is very clear, but I think with a bit more imagery, and fewer rhetorical questions, the poem could be stronger.
chetahgirl20 replied...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 11:51 am
I am aware that my poem could be better in ways, but I wrote this while I was in my class looking at the one I love. It is a true and honest poem, and those are the same questions I was asking myself in class.
Thank you for replying.
colorfulldinosaur said...
Nov. 2, 2009 at 11:30 am
Awsome :)!
Wildheart This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Dec. 22, 2009 at 9:04 pm
That was amazing!
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