Blind

Laughing.
Talking.
Walking.
Never again.
They didn’t see
The red light.
They didn’t see
The black van,
Hauling a soccer princess home.
They didn’t see
The horror erupting.
They didn’t see
The little girl,
Bloody and broken.
They didn’t see
Their last moments.
Laughing.
Talking.
Walking.
Living.
Never again.





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EdytD said...
Nov. 6, 2009 at 4:17 pm
I think this is good, and I like how you keep every line short; it makes it flow well, and the up-down of each word gives it a beat. I like how the line "hauling a soccer princess home" is longer than others, as it emphasizes it. Great job!
 
chetahgirl20 replied...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 11:53 am
As I said before, thank you for your comments, and I appreciate your praise.
 
colorfulldinosaur said...
Nov. 2, 2009 at 11:31 am
Whoa that was really sad but really good ! keep the work up :)
 
chetahgirl20 said...
Oct. 28, 2009 at 11:30 am
Please comment!
 
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