A Free Bird's Song

October 17, 2009
By CarolBush BRONZE, St.Louis, Missouri
CarolBush BRONZE, St.Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
I am the master of my abilities

Trapped in a cage, the bird can't sing,
Without its song, its broken hearted, and broken winged
Its chirp is soft, he's all alone,
Hoping he could leave the cage, and finally fly home,
His energy is leaving, and he's giving up faith,

Because he realizes there's no way to escape,
From his hands nor his feet, The bird lies down weak in defeat,
He feels a hand on his back, and a voice whispers, “Remember nothing can go wrong,”

He's finally allowed to sing a free birds song.

The author's comments:
I wrote this piece because sometimes some people try to hold you down, and keep you from succeeding. Even when you're at the lowest point, some one is always going to believe you. It might be yourself, your friends or family, but remember there is always someone there.

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This article has 2 comments.

on Feb. 23 2010 at 3:43 pm
Karlynne PLATINUM, Orange Park, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass...
It's about learning to dance in the rain.
-Vivian Greene

i agree with Fayrouz. this is an exceptional peice. love it!! check out a few of mine.

Fayrouz SILVER said...
on Oct. 24 2009 at 6:43 pm
Fayrouz SILVER, Fargo, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
"Only dead fish swim with the stream"

I like the theme. it's very thoughtful, but I feel you can make your poem by using more creative language. See, poetry is so small and condensed that in order to say what you want to say in just a small number of lines, you have to use brilliant language to appeal to the senses. May be call the bird exhausted? open a thesaurus, a writer's best friend! I hope I helped? Please check out some of my poems and tell me what you think :)


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