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Friendly Advice

October 9, 2009
By Suzannah BRONZE, OKC, Oklahoma
Suzannah BRONZE, OKC, Oklahoma
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There was a girl
I knew so well,
He took her hand and thought she Was swell.
It seemed okay,
It felt alright,
Until the very end of the night.
The pain she felt and the one he Delt.
She cried to me,
Her voice buzzing like a bee.
I said it's okay,
It'll be alright.
Take a nap until the end of the Night.
In the morning it will be okay,
That boy will have gone his own Way.
You will be okay.
The boy is lost in his own ways,
You are perfect,
Never ever change.
You're my friend,
And it stays the same.
Forever and ever,
It will never change.
So take my friendly advice,
Promise me we'll be best friends Through every night.

Dedicated to Yasmin.


The author's comments:
My best friend is awesome! FRIENDS FOReva!

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Sarbear GOLD said...
on Feb. 21 2010 at 6:44 pm
Sarbear GOLD, Milan, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
--Before you criticize someone, you should walk a mile in their shoes. That way, when you criticize them, you're a mile away from them and you have their shoes.
--When life gives you lemons, squirt them in people's eyes.

I liked the dedication, but the part about the boy really kind of confused me. You rhymed okay with okay. BUt other than that, I really like it and I think you had good ideas. Please check out my poems too, and rate and comment.