Phantom Wings

September 30, 2009
By InfinityRose SILVER, Ambler, Pennsylvania
InfinityRose SILVER, Ambler, Pennsylvania
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Phantom wings
Ride through this night
Alone and trapped
In the never-ending lullaby
And the moon
Cannot hide my despair
With its gleaming surface
And life has given me the choice
I do not want to make
Because when the light shines
And pours onto my face
Half is dark
And half is bright
And I cannot pick
One over the other
The wings soar
Searching to rescue me
From my agony
Yet I cannot be found
And the choice remains
Between the two beings
I love most

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This article has 5 comments.

bffead_1821 said...
on Dec. 14 2009 at 11:11 am
love the poem it shows how your truly feeling.

on Oct. 16 2009 at 6:35 pm
sissykat PLATINUM, Royal Oak, Michigan
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Oh wow! this poem is so deep. i love it. you are an amazing writer.

on Oct. 16 2009 at 5:15 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

This is beautiful! I love how you say 'the wings soar/Searching to rescue me', and 'half is dark/and half is bright', you created really strong images and emotions and chose really good words. Would you look at my work? I'd love your opinion!

cree8ive GOLD said...
on Oct. 16 2009 at 12:36 pm
cree8ive GOLD, Billings, Montana
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Favorite Quote:
"Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure." Mariane Williamson

i'd say it's quite a bit better than decent. i honestly think it's one of the better poems i've read on this site. i think you use very powerful language to portray a strong emotion. if you have any comments for my work, they would be greatly appreciated.

on Oct. 16 2009 at 11:51 am
BradleyCounts SILVER, Lagrange, Georgia
8 articles 0 photos 8 comments
Your poem is decently put have potential to be great........ I sense from your poetry that your depressed and confused on what you should do.. on that note no matter how bad things get its always darkest before the dawn.... things will get better


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