Eclipse

October 7, 2009
By Poetic_Mind PLATINUM, West Monroe, New York
Poetic_Mind PLATINUM, West Monroe, New York
23 articles 12 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A woman's heart should be so lost in God, a man needs to seek him in order to find her."
"It is never the end, Just a chance for a new beginning."


There's been a total eclipse,
on this girl,
ever since you came into her world.
She hasn't seen the sun,
for so long she didnt even know,
anything was wrong.
She only wanted to be his,
to know if he liked her,
one little bit.
She knows she shouldnt like him,
and that its wrong,
but she always thinks of him,
whenever she hears a love sing.
She can't help but look in his eyes
and still dream of his lips,
because on her heart,
he has placed an eclipse.


The author's comments:
This is the first poem I wrote about liking someone I shouldnt have because we were good friends but I kinda couldnt help it.

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on Oct. 19 2009 at 6:07 pm
Poetic_Mind PLATINUM, West Monroe, New York
23 articles 12 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A woman's heart should be so lost in God, a man needs to seek him in order to find her."
"It is never the end, Just a chance for a new beginning."

Thank you.

biter_sweet said...
on Oct. 16 2009 at 2:57 pm
Romance is one of the many inspirations for writing. Never hold back your emotion. Coming from one writer to another I know how much of vent writing can be. Good job. Take your pain and use it. Good job.

on Oct. 16 2009 at 1:59 pm
Poetic_Mind PLATINUM, West Monroe, New York
23 articles 12 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A woman's heart should be so lost in God, a man needs to seek him in order to find her."
"It is never the end, Just a chance for a new beginning."

yeah it didnt work out but thank you for the comment. and im glad i got a good poem out of it. :)

ninian SILVER said...
on Oct. 16 2009 at 10:26 am
ninian SILVER, Alexandria, Virginia
8 articles 0 photos 49 comments

Favorite Quote:
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this is really beautiful i hope it works out for you two


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