A Dip In Her Sins

October 4, 2009
By TigerLynn GOLD, Maysville, Kentucky
TigerLynn GOLD, Maysville, Kentucky
10 articles 0 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"She walks in beauty,
Like the night of cloudless climes and starry skies;
And all that's best of dark and bright
Meet in her aspect and her eyes."
--Byron


She stepped one bare foot into the hot water.
It felt so warm.
She climbed in,
lay down,
let the hot water engulf her body
The lights were dim,
the water dull.
She closed her tired eyes...
a tear dripped into her bath water.
then another
and another.
The water meant to cleanse her sins
was now infected with them.
Yet she lay,
helpless,
soaking up the water,
soaking in her sins.
She kept her eyes closed,
trying to forget.



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OneChance GOLD said...
on Oct. 19 2009 at 2:38 pm
OneChance GOLD, Westland, Michigan
18 articles 8 photos 55 comments

Favorite Quote:
♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥be who YOU want to be, not what OTHERS want to see. ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥

wow i like the part were i said now the waters infected too ts the little things that make a poem ahmazing and i think you got them!! :)

on Oct. 18 2009 at 11:38 am
sunshine.dez. GOLD, Hemet, California
11 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you wish to see in the world"
"Its not what you look at that matters, what matters is how you see it."
"Maybe some women werent meant to be tamed. Maybe they are supposted to run wild until they find someone just as wild to run with"

holy moly!

this is really good.

keep writing!

TigerLynn GOLD said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 4:04 pm
TigerLynn GOLD, Maysville, Kentucky
10 articles 0 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"She walks in beauty,
Like the night of cloudless climes and starry skies;
And all that's best of dark and bright
Meet in her aspect and her eyes."
--Byron

Thank u very much for commenting! I commented on one of yours!

TigerLynn GOLD said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 3:55 pm
TigerLynn GOLD, Maysville, Kentucky
10 articles 0 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"She walks in beauty,
Like the night of cloudless climes and starry skies;
And all that's best of dark and bright
Meet in her aspect and her eyes."
--Byron

ThNKS! That means a lot to me.

on Oct. 14 2009 at 11:28 pm
Veritytrue SILVER, LaVista, Nebraska
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I like it! It's creative and powerful! Good job!

on Oct. 14 2009 at 11:27 pm
I really lyked this poem!! The emotion u put in it was incredibly strong, and u did it in a unique way. It's obvious that u see the world in a way that most ppl don't. :) keep writing, this was great!!

TigerLynn GOLD said...
on Oct. 14 2009 at 2:03 pm
TigerLynn GOLD, Maysville, Kentucky
10 articles 0 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"She walks in beauty,
Like the night of cloudless climes and starry skies;
And all that's best of dark and bright
Meet in her aspect and her eyes."
--Byron

Thanks so much for commenting! I really wish more people would.

on Oct. 14 2009 at 1:06 am
LovelyLynn BRONZE, Brea, California
4 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everyone is made for another in this world"

It was nice, I can feel the emotions in the poem as I read it. I like it a lot, Very creative and you chose good words to describe it. Like when you said "Let the hot water engulf her body" ta-ta

~LovelyLynn

TigerLynn GOLD said...
on Oct. 12 2009 at 3:23 pm
TigerLynn GOLD, Maysville, Kentucky
10 articles 0 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"She walks in beauty,
Like the night of cloudless climes and starry skies;
And all that's best of dark and bright
Meet in her aspect and her eyes."
--Byron

I'd really appreciate it if you rated and commented my work! Thanks!


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