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She stepped one bare foot into the hot water.
It felt so warm.
She climbed in,
lay down,
let the hot water engulf her body
The lights were dim,
the water dull.
She closed her tired eyes...
a tear dripped into her bath water.
then another
and another.
The water meant to cleanse her sins
was now infected with them.
Yet she lay,
helpless,
soaking up the water,
soaking in her sins.
She kept her eyes closed,
trying to forget.




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ARQUETTE13 said...
Oct. 19, 2009 at 2:38 pm:
wow i like the part were i said now the waters infected too ts the little things that make a poem ahmazing and i think you got them!! :)
 
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sunshine.dez. said...
Oct. 18, 2009 at 11:38 am:
holy moly!
this is really good.
keep writing!
 
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TigerLynn said...
Oct. 15, 2009 at 4:04 pm:
Thank u very much for commenting! I commented on one of yours!
 
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Veritytrue said...
Oct. 14, 2009 at 11:28 pm:
I like it! It's creative and powerful! Good job!
 
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PotentialFailure said...
Oct. 14, 2009 at 11:27 pm:
I really lyked this poem!! The emotion u put in it was incredibly strong, and u did it in a unique way. It's obvious that u see the world in a way that most ppl don't. :) keep writing, this was great!!
 
TigerLynn replied...
Oct. 15, 2009 at 3:55 pm :
ThNKS! That means a lot to me.
 
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LovelyLynn said...
Oct. 14, 2009 at 1:06 am:
It was nice, I can feel the emotions in the poem as I read it. I like it a lot, Very creative and you chose good words to describe it. Like when you said "Let the hot water engulf her body" ta-ta
~LovelyLynn
 
TigerLynn replied...
Oct. 14, 2009 at 2:03 pm :
Thanks so much for commenting! I really wish more people would.
 
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TigerLynn said...
Oct. 12, 2009 at 3:23 pm:
I'd really appreciate it if you rated and commented my work! Thanks!
 
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