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October 8, 2009
By Luke Noles BRONZE, Orlando, Florida
Luke Noles BRONZE, Orlando, Florida
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Lonely two-lane roads,
dark, thick woods,
and rolling hills.
The sun sets behind us,
our eyes are drowsy, we can drive no more.

At a Ramada Inn
we ask the clerk
about restaurants with local color
since we can go to McDonald's at home.
Across the street, he says,
you'll find the Dixie Railroad.

A few old trucks
in the parking lot.
A Confederate flag hangs on the door.
No windows,
no sounds,
no life.

Southern Hospitality, the sign says.
So we enter and are overcome
by the stench of cigarettes
and the jukebox boom-chicka-boom
of Johnny Cash's
“Get Rhythm.”

People sitting in the bar
are unmoving,
unblinking,
unsmiling,
unfeeling,
unholy.

We tiptoe into another room:
dark, unadorned,
an empty stage,
in an empty space
where only the ghosts of happiness remain.

The faded lady
behind the bar
stares at us in silence.
Her customers do the same.
They seem dead,
yet they seem angry.

We head straight for the car
and pull onto the interstate
thinking only one thing
as we look for familiar flashing neon signs:
right now
A Big Mac never sounded so good.



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spiria BRONZE said...
on Dec. 28 2010 at 9:29 am
spiria BRONZE, Fullerton, California
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Wow.. it's like I'm there at the scene! Such descriptive details!

I love the ending. :)


Eilatan GOLD said...
on May. 3 2010 at 5:56 am
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

THIS IS AMAZING.

such a wry ending! i love the title and how it fits in so naicely with everything else... good job!!!!!


on Mar. 14 2010 at 3:41 pm
Skittlelover SILVER, Aurora, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
Sick of crying, tired of trying. I may be smiling but inside I'm dying

Wow...You are so talented and I love this poem!!!

on Oct. 25 2009 at 3:36 pm
Louis Satoshi Raymond Kori, Chuo-ku, Tokyo, Other
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WONDERFUL!!!!!!!!!!

Duckie430 said...
on Oct. 23 2009 at 12:10 pm
Duckie430, Riverside, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
“The secret to life is being who you are and being happy with who you are.”
"Whatever does not kill you only makes you stronger."

this is really interesting. good job.

Ivette. BRONZE said...
on Oct. 12 2009 at 2:18 pm
Ivette. BRONZE, Austin, Texas
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i like the repetition that u use in this poem

on Oct. 11 2009 at 9:43 pm
CelticThundeGurl SILVER, Benson, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"It is time for us to realize that we are too great a nation to limit ourselves to small dreams."






















- Pres. Ronald Reagan

Nicely written i must say, but you can find "dead" places anywhere. Luckily, i'm from North Carolina, a bit more life and good times here! LOL I love the slow pace of things. I'll admit it's not for everyone, but it fits me. :)

- Country Girl

on Oct. 11 2009 at 3:09 pm
Mandiella DIAMOND, Plaistow, New Hampshire
73 articles 58 photos 349 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't waste time. Start procrastinating now.

Great poem. No wonder it got published in the magazine! I loved your descriptions. I recently went to South Carolina so the title of your poem is what made me read it.

Katie.T. GOLD said...
on Oct. 10 2009 at 1:55 pm
Katie.T. GOLD, Chaptico, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"Why go for a 100%, when with a little more, you can have 110%." -KT

Such a wonderful poem. Like a story, I didn't no what was going to happen next!

colcojo said...
on Oct. 8 2009 at 9:35 pm
I really enjoyed the poem, both in the way you wrote it and also how you organized it. The topic you chose to write about also interests me greatly. I particuarly liked you described the people sitting at the bar as,

"unmoving,

unblinking,

unsmiling,

unfeeling,

unholy."

becuase my brain naturally associates all of those "un" words with a negative connotation, which is exactly (I hope) the effect you were hoping for. I also liked how you put in the part that told us that you wanted to go to a place with "local color", and that place ended up having an unfriendly atmosphere, still relevant of a conflict that happened hundreds of years ago. It showed me that descrimination is still alive, even though we try to cover it up. Overall, I think this poem has a deep, serious meaninig, and I would easily give it five out of five stars.

on Oct. 8 2009 at 2:53 pm
LostinthisWorld.67 BRONZE, Charleston, South Carolina
4 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You don't know what you got till it's gone."

This is really good. I live in South Carolina.


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