She is

September 28, 2009
By laneyb GOLD, St Paul, Oregon
laneyb GOLD, St Paul, Oregon
17 articles 7 photos 11 comments

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I am a quote addict. I spend majority of my time writing down quotes I hear.


She is the girl.
Her eyes filled of hope and prayer.
Her mind cluttered with truth.
Her eyes open to the broken people, to the whole people.
Her arms outstretched to any person.
Her heart ready to hand out pieces to whomever she says hello.
Her tears waiting to join in your tears; her laughter constant in rhyme with yours.
She is the girl. Ready to love.
Living to love.



Because she is alive.
She is breathing.
She has come through trial, and triumph.
She is yours, all of her.
She is completely in love with each and everyone of you.



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laneyb GOLD said...
on Dec. 7 2009 at 11:40 am
laneyb GOLD, St Paul, Oregon
17 articles 7 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am a quote addict. I spend majority of my time writing down quotes I hear.

I think that when I wrote this I wanted the readers to get the image that the truth overwhelming her mind was a bad thing. Like she was scared of the truth but it was trying to take her over...?

on Dec. 5 2009 at 1:43 pm
SilverDawn GOLD, Burnaby, Other
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Whoa, i really like this! It's so sweet (: one thing though: "her mind cluttered with truth" that's a good thing, right? I just think that cluttered means messy, with a negative connotation. maybe if you changed that, your poem would be even better!

laneyb GOLD said...
on Nov. 18 2009 at 9:45 pm
laneyb GOLD, St Paul, Oregon
17 articles 7 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am a quote addict. I spend majority of my time writing down quotes I hear.

Thank you so much! I read these reviews just when I needed them!

taylorrr GOLD said...
on Oct. 10 2009 at 9:05 pm
taylorrr GOLD, Fremont, Nebraska
11 articles 1 photo 3 comments

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Life isn't about finding yourself. Life is about creating yourself.

this is very well worded...i really like it...

on Oct. 9 2009 at 12:07 pm
Sumemrdaze SILVER, Puryear, Tennessee
7 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be the fruitloop in a world full of cherrios.

I enjoyed this:) I love how you made the girl seem so needy but at the same time she was just being her and needing a friend. Great job:)

colcona said...
on Oct. 8 2009 at 9:05 pm
I love this poem. You did an exceptional job choosing your words. I especially liked when you said, “Her arms outstretched to any person.” This makes me think that the character in your poem puts everyone else before her and accepts everyone for who they are. I also liked when you said, “Her tears waiting to join in your tears; her laughter constant in rhyme with yours.” I interpret this to mean that the girl in your poem also cares about other people, and feels their pain our joy. Great job with this poem! I hope to read more pieces from you.

Nicky SILVER said...
on Oct. 8 2009 at 10:05 am
Nicky SILVER, Sturgeon Falls, Other
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omg! i love it


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