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Vampire

September 23, 2009
By TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
183 articles 7 photos 484 comments

Favorite Quote:
He's the one I call in the middle of the night. He's the one who makes everything alright. He loves me with no regret...I just haven't found him yet.


He ran past me, a blur of colors
He was so full of speed, I almost didn't believe it
His eyes, gold and and entrancing
And his skin, smooth and pale
He was only eighteen, but with his wisdom, seemed so old
I couldn't describe his unhumanly looks
Handsome was an understatement
He couldn't be real
So fast, so strong, so handsome
He was just a fantasy, a mirage
He was too perfect to be real
But as he looked at me, he licked his lips
He gazed at me with desire
He was bloodthirsty
He crouched down, ready to pounce
And still I was flustered, not knowing what was going on
He was just a fantasy, a dream
"Who are you?" I shouted
No reply
"Who are you?"
He still didn't answer
Instead, he grinned wickedly
But even through his evil stare, he was mesmorizing
He couldn't be real, there was no way
No one was that amazingly gorgeous
He was just a fantasy, a hallucination
He jumped up high into the air
And the sun reflected off of his porceilan features
His skin glowed, sparkled even, as it hit the light
I gazed upon his beauty, oblivious to what was happening
He landed right in front of me, his hands held out
Before I knew what was happening, he held my neck in front of him
The pain of his fangs in my flesh was excruciating
It was like nothing I'd ever felt before
And as my body was drained of blood, I knew
He was not just a fantasy or mirage
No, not just a dream or halluciniation
He was a vampire


The author's comments:
This piece was mostly inspired by Twilight. I love the saga and before reading it, I was never really interested in werewolves or vampires. But now that I've read it, I love it!

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on Jul. 4 2010 at 5:39 am
Chinadoll BRONZE, Dallas, Texas
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Nice! I really like it!

on Jul. 3 2010 at 4:22 pm
TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
183 articles 7 photos 484 comments

Favorite Quote:
He's the one I call in the middle of the night. He's the one who makes everything alright. He loves me with no regret...I just haven't found him yet.

wow thats like amazing!!! haha i'm so ecstatic that i've actually inspired someone! haha, what's the name of the story? i'd love to read it :)

on Jun. 26 2010 at 4:13 pm
ilove2read124 GOLD, Dix Hills, New York
11 articles 0 photos 66 comments
that was really good, the picture fits perfectly =] i really love whatever you write.youre an amazing writer.im writing my own story, but i gave up because i ran out of ideas.reading your work motivated me again and gave me new ideas thanks =D keep writing

on Apr. 19 2010 at 8:33 pm
fusrodahsaraaa GOLD, Albany, Other
16 articles 5 photos 47 comments
You have such talent... nice work! :)

on Feb. 26 2010 at 9:20 am
xLoVeLyCuTiEe428x PLATINUM, Nanuet, New York
24 articles 0 photos 103 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To me, Fearless is not the absense of fear. It's not being completely unafraid. To me, Fearless is having fears. Fearless is having doubts. Lots of them. To me, Fearless is living in spite of those things that scare you to death."
— Taylor Swift

Whoa! Loved it! Great writing!

on Feb. 25 2010 at 11:30 pm
bamboom212 PLATINUM, Chestnut Ridge, New York
23 articles 0 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The truth with a bad intent, is worse than any lie you can ever invent."
"You are smarter than you think. You are stronger than you look. You are braver than you feel."

omg u have such incredible talent! plz keep writing!

on Oct. 25 2009 at 9:30 pm
YouCanCallMeAlex SILVER, Cavecreek, Arizona
7 articles 0 photos 6 comments
You are an amazing writer!! You really should think about puplishing some of your work!

on Oct. 23 2009 at 3:21 pm
BeautifulSimplicity BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
2 articles 0 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
We keep it light, until it's time to go dark. Then we go pitch black.

DANG I THOUGTH IT WAS LIKE A REAMKE OF TWILIGHT BUT IT ISNT DANG!

on Oct. 10 2009 at 12:15 pm
SilverAngel SILVER, West Carollton, Ohio
8 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is an open book, we take the journey until the end." ~Me

AMAZING! That was such a good poem/story!

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on Oct. 5 2009 at 4:23 pm
Anjo! SILVER, Roseburg, Oregon
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DUDE!! WOAH! DUDE WOAH!!! gah! that was pretty awesome. i thought you were going to go off of Twilight or something but you changed it. and she died! how sad!


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