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September 17, 2009
By Christos Schrader BRONZE, Wyckoff, New Jersey
Christos Schrader BRONZE, Wyckoff, New Jersey
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the fiery sun beats down upon the sand,
a fallen king sits taking its abuse.
trapped in places no one understands,
his worth has faded from the years of use.
the time he’s spent here all amounts to naught,
frozen in the fires by the sea,
and, wrapped up in his solitary thoughts,
he’s stuck in limbo for eternity.
and over time he slowly fades away,
a shadow of the man he used to be.
the sand grows higher every single day,
and soon there will be nothing left to see,
unless some kindred soul’s haphazard glance
can catch the glint of bronze and take the chance.



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on Sep. 12 2011 at 11:30 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." - Michelangelo
"I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am." - Sylvia Plath

this is by the far, the best poem I've read in teenink. saying I loooovvveedd it is not enough. it's just everything I can ask for in a poem. it's amazing. you blow me away. your choice of words and metaphors and everything is just magnificent. please keep writing! :) -5 stars-

on Dec. 9 2009 at 12:29 am
Stephanie Chen GOLD, Vancouver, Other
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This is beautifully crafted! The rhymes are original! I love the flow of the words from one line to the other. It's great!

on Oct. 5 2009 at 5:22 pm
violetfaye BRONZE, London, Other
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Wow, really liked that! As someone said before, nice flow and style

on Sep. 21 2009 at 4:26 pm
Giraffe2234 GOLD, Marshall, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Dont be a hata.

When you feel like giving think of what made you hang on this long.

Tell your secrets. They free you.

love this poem. its so unique. and whats haphazard?

on Sep. 18 2009 at 9:30 pm
FlamableFyre DIAMOND, Spartanburg, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
I don't have ambitions or desires.
Being a poet isn't my ambition,
it's my way of being alone.
~ Fernando Pessoa ~

Wow, i loved it, it was so... i cant explain it! that was amazing!

on Sep. 17 2009 at 9:57 pm
Veritytrue SILVER, LaVista, Nebraska
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I think this is a really good poem. I like the way you did the rhyme scheme-- it gives the poem a good, rolling rhythm which workes well with the subject matter. It's very well written- good job!

on Sep. 17 2009 at 5:09 pm
XRamirez SILVER, Round Rock, Texas
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"frozen in fires by the sea" sick line. I like this poem reminds me somewhat of my own writing style

on Sep. 17 2009 at 4:49 pm
LuckieMistake PLATINUM, Florence, Colorado
22 articles 1 photo 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What doesn't kill me only, will make me stronger in my head..." Papa Roach, Kick In The Teeth

wow that was really good i liked ti alot!


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