Fallin' Angel

September 3, 2009
By Prosaic-Scriptor BRONZE, Davis, California
Prosaic-Scriptor BRONZE, Davis, California
4 articles 0 photos 24 comments

I fell

d

o


w


n




till I reached the stars.



So I whispered to the heavens



that they needed polishing but



god doesn't listen to the likes of me.


(




no






)




god doesn't listen to me.

Papa told me he saved a spot
but Daddy, I looked,
and someone must have taken it.
'cause all the spots are filled in Heaven.

(

and I'm alone


i'm alone. )





Sissy's






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and mama said she'd beat me






if I sang the angel's songs.





no I can't sing the angel's songs.

I just wanna













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g








l







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w
(
sweet chariot





)

but heaven's only open for the
good girls
the good girls!



and no one's comin' for to carry me home.







(no)










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ain't





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goin'






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e


The author's comments:
I wrote this picturing a poor, battered Southern girl, whose father died and left her alone. I tried to convey that feeling of desperation and sadness.

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on Jun. 27 2011 at 4:55 pm
freeflow23 GOLD, Durham, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Saul saw Goliath as too big to kill. David saw he was too big to miss.
W.W.J.D.

I truly love all of your writing. You're amazing!

on Apr. 1 2010 at 7:31 pm
magic-esi PLATINUM, Hyde Park, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The mark of the immature man is that he wants to die nobly for a cause, while the mark of the mature man is that he wants to live humbly for one."
"Happiness can be found even in the darkest of times, if only one remembers to turn on the light."

It was a beautiful poem (although something happened to the formatting there which made it hard to read.) I liked your reference to the song, 'Swing Low, Sweet Chariot' or whatever it's called. 

Please write some more poetry, stories, reviews, whatever! There's barely anything good to read nowadays and your writing is REALLY good.


on Feb. 3 2010 at 3:41 pm
alayapoetgirl BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Life is hard; but it's harder if you're stupid. -John Wayne

Poet to poet, I truly enjoyed this poem.

The structure of it gave me the emphasis I was searching for. (said with excitement)! You're great at what you do! Keep writing and

You'll reach the TOP.


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