A hand to hold

August 23, 2009
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When times get rough we all brake down and cry.

When we go through our upd and downs it's good to have someone there who understands.

But when i go through a hard time i need a hand to hold me from this edge I'm falling from.

So when you need a hand to hold; hold mine and I'll always be there for you

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RebeccaA said...
Sept. 15, 2009 at 4:11 pm
I don't really like it. There is little description, real experience, and it lacks a lot of things like description. It is a nice length though, but maybe try describing it more and use a personal experience of you or someone you know.
~*The-Broken-Hearted-Girl*~ replied...
Sept. 15, 2009 at 4:46 pm
you don't need a description in a poem. Most of the time readers are supposed to guess what the poem is about.
RebeccaAntonaccio replied...
Sept. 16, 2009 at 10:46 am
It is a good poem, but maybe if it just made a little bit more sense than it wouldn't need description
Libby M. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 14, 2009 at 6:53 pm
I LOVE this poem. It's short and sweet, but it also has a deeper meaning to it. Free verse is such a great expression of poetry.
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