A hand to hold

August 23, 2009
By budlofskie GOLD, Pueblo West, Colorado
budlofskie GOLD, Pueblo West, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
" And so the lion fell in love with the lamb"


When times get rough we all brake down and cry.

When we go through our upd and downs it's good to have someone there who understands.

But when i go through a hard time i need a hand to hold me from this edge I'm falling from.

So when you need a hand to hold; hold mine and I'll always be there for you



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This article has 4 comments.


on Sep. 16 2009 at 10:46 am
It is a good poem, but maybe if it just made a little bit more sense than it wouldn't need description

on Sep. 15 2009 at 4:46 pm
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

you don't need a description in a poem. Most of the time readers are supposed to guess what the poem is about.

on Sep. 15 2009 at 4:11 pm
Phoenix22 PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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I don't really like it. There is little description, real experience, and it lacks a lot of things like description. It is a nice length though, but maybe try describing it more and use a personal experience of you or someone you know.

liblib33 GOLD said...
on Sep. 14 2009 at 6:53 pm
liblib33 GOLD, Dedham, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Life sucks then you die-- yeah I should be so lucky.
--Jacob "Breaking Dawn"

I LOVE this poem. It's short and sweet, but it also has a deeper meaning to it. Free verse is such a great expression of poetry.


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