Beautiful Eyebrows

August 30, 2009
By FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
53 articles 29 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This, too, will pass."


When she was younger,
She skipped class and played truth-or-dare
In the woods with her cousin.

She jumped rope and won little competitions
About beauty and style…
She trimmed her eyebrows;
Obsessively,
Until one day, out of frustration,
She shaved them off.

It took her months to grow them back,
But when they did,
They were thick and lush;
Beautiful eyebrows,
She had…

She married a bad man
Who beat her
And strangled her birds with
The golden-handled jump-rope
She won in 10th grade.

When he did, she didn’t cry.
She just stared---
Nearly numb, except for the frown
That furrowed
In between her beautiful eyebrows.


The author's comments:
I normally hate this type of poems... they're too intense for me. But I gave it a shot anyway.

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on Jul. 16 2014 at 7:42 am
HumeraThahur SILVER, Yanbu Industrial City, Other
5 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you want your dreams to come true, don't sleep.

Beautiful, just beautiful! Great job, you had me smiling at the end.

on May. 13 2014 at 12:26 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 860 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Wow, you practically slapped me in the face. This was really nice! I don't know why you thought this was intense-overkill, but honestly it was dramatic yet very to-the-point. I loved it. I also love how the focus is her eyebrows. It's quite peculiar and reminds me of myself a little... I have to ask, though, whose POV is this from? Who would focus so much on eyebrows when this girl clearly has so much other stuff going on? I'm under no circumstances trying to be sassy, I'm genuinely curious. Overall, really cool. It's chilling.

Mckay ELITE said...
on Sep. 10 2013 at 12:56 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I'm not sure why I haven't commented on this before, even though I always see it in the top spots every day. Regardless, I think it's wonderful. You should be very happy you wrote despite being as you say "intense" for your taste. It is emotionally intense. But you summed the life of many girls who live awful lives like this. First, they're princesses to the public; but their real lives are nightmares. It's sad but it happens all the time. Very well written. I like the imagery. Keep writing stuff like this. 

sarah98 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 25 2013 at 8:40 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
1 article 0 photos 406 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

jw, whats your inspiration for this? It's so gorgeous and unique, this kind of writing has to come from somewhere.

Skyset GOLD said...
on Feb. 14 2013 at 9:35 pm
Skyset GOLD, Goddard, Kansas
13 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Use what talents you possess. The Woods would be very quiet if no birds sang there except those that sang best."
--Henry Van Dyke

Excellent! I was especially moved at the part with the birds. You have some real talent, keep in up!

on Dec. 26 2012 at 7:55 pm
HiddengoldTee SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
7 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Procrastination was created to give you time for the things that you'd otherwise have no time for"
-Me

This poem is so full of emotion. it makes me remember the feelings of being frustrated by something small while really there is an underlying hurt. Great poem!

on Sep. 12 2009 at 1:42 pm
FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
53 articles 29 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This, too, will pass."

Wow, thank you for the great comment (Haha, and yes, I am a girl)! There is no pattern... for the most part, all my poems are free-style, with no patterns. =]

Again, thank you so much for the amazing compliments, I really appreciate it!

~S.E.M

Fayrouz SILVER said...
on Sep. 12 2009 at 1:33 pm
Fayrouz SILVER, Fargo, North Dakota
9 articles 12 photos 364 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Only dead fish swim with the stream"

I LOVE how you used eyebrows to describe her. I don't know if you're a girl, but you describe it in a way that I can relate to it, especially the eyebrows and frustration part. You don't know anything about the girl really, except for her eyebrows but how you describe it is just really nice. It has substance, if you know what I mean? I'm just wondering, did you write it according to a certain syllable pattern or just whatever came out?

on Sep. 11 2009 at 8:49 pm
FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
53 articles 29 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This, too, will pass."

Thanks for your support! It was an experiment... and you've just confirmed my success! <3

~S.E.M

Brndi said...
on Sep. 11 2009 at 12:53 pm
very good poem i love it its not like anything ive ever read before its unique!! great job keep it going ;]

on Sep. 8 2009 at 7:33 pm
FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
53 articles 29 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This, too, will pass."

Thank you very much! It was a successful experiment, then! ^-^

on Sep. 8 2009 at 6:19 pm
blingblang4eva ELITE, Fayetteville, Georgia
160 articles 0 photos 105 comments
very unique and well written. the transition between emotions were very sharp and very effective.




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