Please Can I Have That Guy? This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

June 30, 2009
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Please can I have that guy who sings to me?
Please can I have that guy
Who knows how to raise my cheekbones from ear to ear in the most unfeasible situations
Who doesn’t mind my immense eating habit and finds it to be intriguing
Wondering why the food doesn’t stick
Like nectar on bees
Who makes me the only dirt cakes from scratch which he says he put his whole foot in
Who walks like cocky Tyson Beckford with his superlative swagger across the catwalk
Who recalls my every knock-knock joke and has them all stored in the back of his mind like a FedEx package
Originated from my inner Dave Chappelle
Ready to be delivered out the soles of his lips,
To be mutual between us once again –
And no one can interpret this but us because
It’s our little secretive jest
Who keeps that Orbit fresh breath and ­Colgate smile;
Who talks like a baby Barry White, with his assuring
Big daddy tone in preparation of a slow ­seduction
Of my mind mentally silent from the world;
Who knows that bombarding me with ­compliments
Like an overflowing sullied toilet filled with feces, urine, gum, and hair
Is just too typical: please can I have that guy friend
Who knows that I don’t want that.
Who is not prepared to change himself to ­appease me.
Who, when I collapse to the floor like an iron-lacking anemic
While broken with tears and moaning like an abused milked cow
That enjoys nothing but the fresh dry grass
From the vast fields of the suffering and ­polluted earth used and abused,
Picks me up like a strong lion would grab his cub in the clutch of its mouth.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Eilatan This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 9, 2010 at 3:13 pm
i love this poem.
tara* said...
Apr. 9, 2010 at 11:56 am
whoa. amazing . Thank you.
together242000 said...
Apr. 9, 2010 at 10:58 am

I loved this poem so much. You did a great job on it! It spoke to my heart.

Great Joy

SolvoAnimus said...
Mar. 19, 2010 at 3:31 am
Me Tarzan.... You Jane!
Skittlelover said...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 9:34 pm
Laughed at your metaphor/simile
unknown&unspoken said...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 9:28 pm
Great poem. I really loved it!
miz.pretty.yung.thang said...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 8:57 pm
i luv this poem.
dominicana said...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 7:31 pm
i really like this poem and i can definitely relate A++
snc947 said...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 3:32 pm
whoa. i love it.
Talia12 said...
Mar. 18, 2010 at 9:12 am
i love this piece...its so shows actual emotion and character...awesome job!!!
s8erdude said...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 11:14 pm
Very good job i think i understand th ending. The ending is kinda like how she doesnt want a guy whos gna tell her what she wants to know she wants a guy whos going to be real whos not going to change and whose going to be there for her
ClaraS! This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 11, 2010 at 5:56 am
i really liked the idea behind the poem, but i agree that it went a bit of track towards the end. don't use too many adjectives though, you don't need them all. still, its better than what i could do!
Tamara*Monta replied...
Feb. 2, 2010 at 12:35 pm
I enjoy the poem but i do agree that in the end you lost me
LeilaniLives said...
Dec. 20, 2009 at 11:08 am
Towards the end, I don't think it was clear enough, like there were hidden passage ways you didn't even know were there. Maybe you might want to rethink this poem and what it really means to you, more in depth. Maybe you have, I'm not sure. Anyways, I absolutely loved the first half of your piece. Filled with an ounce of every man, but just like the others, it did have a sad romance to it.
nette2010 said...
Nov. 6, 2009 at 3:09 pm
Peace_seeker said...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 6:48 pm
Soooo, for the most part I liked it... After all it's a million times better than anything I could write, but I think it needs somthing more...
MariaMarie This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 7, 2009 at 3:41 pm
This is awesome, the first time I read it I fell in love with it but didn't have time to comment- so i bookmarked the page, I'm glad i did :) This is going into my favs! Could you read a couple of my poems please? One is "Neither of Us" And the other is "Afraid Of Always Loving You" ?
Annisah T. said...
Sept. 6, 2009 at 3:53 pm
that wouild be wonderful to have that feeling again
LIV2011 said...
Aug. 28, 2009 at 1:42 am
so different, so good, so clever, love it.
corshaaa29 said...
Aug. 26, 2009 at 10:40 pm
I personally loved this poem, you put everything about the perfect man in one poem!!! Wow, this is amazing and breath taking, and it's so crazy because my boyfriend is just like this. I'm going to let him read it !!! GREAT JOB: %Pr
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