Puberty MAG

June 17, 2009
By Zach Blake BRONZE, Guilford, New Hampshire
Zach Blake BRONZE, Guilford, New Hampshire
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Like bread jammed into a toaster.
Caught between one world and the next
He longs to be buttered
but is still premature.

He is frightened of the orange juice,
her long slender body and
golden pulp-filled nectar.
she is plates ahead of him.

but still with thirty seconds left,
he could easily go back and sit
with his twenty-three soft companions
inside his shell of plastic with no worries.

They could settle for peanut-butter and fluff,
but he longs for the cherry jam
to smear across his crisp, tanned surface.
And still, he is not quite there.

If he attempts to emerge too soon he will
appear flimsy and tasteless.
If he falters a little he will become charred.
Undesirable, worthless dog food.

But as soon as his courage goes stale,
he feels his beckoning. A metallic thud urges him
to a world of hunger-filled breath,
thrust into the life he has desired for ages.

He finally feels needed as he is set beside
his buddy bacon, and among his cousin
egg. His life of worthless counter-topping
is finally sliced.



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TrishDestiny said...
on Feb. 23 2015 at 9:02 am
This is such an exquisite, ominous piece. The metaphor is undeniably outstanding and grotesquely amazing at the same time. Perfectly written and creatively insightful! Just awesome!

on Apr. 21 2013 at 8:35 am
steelsoprano DIAMOND, Cincinnati, Ohio
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I have never heard such a bug metaphor :)

on Feb. 14 2013 at 7:20 pm
ChrisJ PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Man must evolve for all human conflict a method which rejects revenge, aggression and retaliation. The foundation of such a method is love.”
- Martin Luther King Jr.

Very creative and insightful, good job!

on Mar. 16 2010 at 8:33 pm
laptoploser1220 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
“Put your hand on a hot stove for a minute, and it seems like an hour. Sit with a pretty girl for an hour, and it seems like a minute. THAT'S relativity.”- Albert Einstein

This is so creative. I love the way you expressed this(:

dragon13245 said...
on Aug. 26 2009 at 1:52 pm
i like it.

on Aug. 12 2009 at 5:38 am
bite.sized.beauty GOLD, Woodridge, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
true boredom is perfection

i liked it alot. i loved the metaphor

on Jul. 26 2009 at 1:43 am
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
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interesting.... but wonderful....

haiuopl BRONZE said...
on Jul. 25 2009 at 2:41 am
haiuopl BRONZE, Apple, Texas
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lol i really liked this. not at all what i thought it was going to be with a title like "puberty", but it was cute and funny.

on Jul. 18 2009 at 11:39 pm
FlamableFyre DIAMOND, Spartanburg, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
I don't have ambitions or desires.
Being a poet isn't my ambition,
it's my way of being alone.
~ Fernando Pessoa ~

I didnt understand most of it. but an interesting topic. :-)

on Jun. 30 2009 at 7:49 pm
good job overall.

unstable topic though, don't you think?

on Jun. 29 2009 at 8:34 pm
Vindictive_Love BRONZE, Abq, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
Talent wins games, but teamwork and intelligence wins championships.
Michael Jordan

Whatever you do in life, will be insignificant, but it's very important that you do it.
Mahatma Ghandi

wow awesome lol. i love how you made the metaphors sound so good with the writing. it was really good. keep up the good work and please read and comment my writing please!!! lol =)

on Jun. 25 2009 at 11:50 pm
one_of_a_kind_girl GOLD, N/A, California
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i love the comparison!! never would have thought of it that way before

on Jun. 25 2009 at 6:07 am
chelsie rivers BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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omg i tottallly love what you wrote,its soooo awsome!

on Jun. 21 2009 at 6:01 pm
cmoney1994 PLATINUM, Newark, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Be the best you an be as you can see i try to be by writing poetry.

Very good i like all the Metaphors and similes

Schubster said...
on Jun. 21 2009 at 1:50 pm
loved the metaphors in this piece. :) great poem

Angelou GOLD said...
on Jun. 21 2009 at 1:42 am
Angelou GOLD, Pointe Claire, Other
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I loved the risqué double-entendres

on Jun. 20 2009 at 10:52 pm
KaylaMarie SILVER, West Sunbury, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
you dont know what youve got until its gone

awesome poem. <3 you should continue to write you have a great talent

Amber1994 GOLD said...
on Jun. 20 2009 at 10:24 pm
Amber1994 GOLD, Roanoke, Illinois
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whoa this is REALLY GOOD. My favorite part is

"A metallic thud urges him

to a world of hunger-filled breath,

thrust into the life he has desired for ages."

Taliaaa BRONZE said...
on Jun. 20 2009 at 11:15 am
Taliaaa BRONZE, Medford, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
I wish I were a glow worm, a glow worm's never glum. I mean, how could you be grumpy when the sun shines out your bum? ;]

whoa

on Jun. 20 2009 at 3:02 am
OoODerekOoO BRONZE, Kinde, Michigan
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This is Really amazing. It actually describes puberty quite well. very nice job.




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