To a Brother Growing Up

June 2, 2009
By imperfection GOLD, Gilroy, California
imperfection GOLD, Gilroy, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Dream as though you'll live forever, live as though you'll die today."
~James Dean (1931-1955), American Motion Picture Actor, symbol of rebellion


When I taught you
At six to kick
A soccer ball, rolling along
In front of you
As you pulled back
On your two young legs
My own eyes widening
In shock when you dribbled
Across the stretched
Field of the complex
I held my breath
For the scream
Of your trip as I
Jogged to catch up
While you grew faster, more rickety
With distance
Running, running
For your life, smiling
To the world
Jersey flapping
Behind you like
Your own flag, saying
Goodbye



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PoetPanda GOLD said...
on Oct. 24 at 7:20 am
PoetPanda GOLD, Hanahan, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Either I will find a way or I will make a way."

After reading "To a Daughter Leaving Home" I have to agree with @TeeWithTheFuzzyHair . However, it is so similar that I am inclined to believe there is no way that @imperfection was attempting to pass this off as their own original work. Giving the benefit of doubt, I'd say that the similarities were probably the point, as "To a Daughter Leaving Home" is a fairly well known poem.

on Jul. 11 at 7:59 pm
TeeWithTheFuzzyHair BRONZE, Pawling, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Let Your Tone Get Their Attention; Let Your Words Carry The Message" - Charles Scott

Uhhh I hate to be the one to comment this, but there is a poem called "To a Daughter Leaving Home" by Linda Pastan that is.... extremely similar to this. I'm not sure if that was the point and you were trying to make it sound similar to that, but I think it is a little strange that the poems are almost exactly the same, except this one is just a little altered... It seems more than just a coincidence to me. No hate or anything, I just couldn't tell if that was one of the points of the poem lol

on Jul. 3 at 3:17 pm
wuadbwabdu BRONZE, Wenatchee, Washington
3 articles 1 photo 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
If your reading this your too late - Drake

dumb..

on Jun. 14 at 5:33 pm
Christi_Line GOLD, American Fork, Utah
15 articles 4 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I don't make mistakes, I just make really sloppy successes." - me

You gave me goosebumps omg

on Oct. 14 2011 at 6:29 pm
JosieSmash BRONZE, Toledo, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
life is 10% what happens to you, and 90% how you react to it. :)

I reallly like this :)

on Jan. 12 2010 at 1:55 pm
SilverLuna SILVER, _________, Washington
8 articles 0 photos 230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Come fairies take me out of this dull world, for I would ride with you upon the wind and dance upon the mountains like a flame.".... W.B. Yeats.
"Flying is learning how to throw yourself at the ground and miss." - Douglas Adams

Iloved this because you kind of embrace how others around you are growing up, and to be attached emotionallly...well, it's painful! Great job!

Oh, and thanks for commenting on my work!

on Sep. 3 2009 at 10:12 pm
yaelephant5 PLATINUM, Potomac, Maryland
29 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing, I think, is not apart from living. Writing is a kind of double living. The writer experiences everything twice. Once in reality and once in the mirror which waits always before or behind."

i love this! so sad and so true.


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