Worthless Things MAG

By Felicia B., Gilford, NH

     She drives me to school in her black BMW,
I offer her money for gas, but she graciously declines,
He pays, she explains.
She’s daddy’s little girl,
At least that’s how she feels when her minutes spent with him
Become a series of ring tones and bad connections.
Business takes him around a familiar world,
While his domestic stays seem foreign.

It’s his birthday, she tells me, wants a framed prom photo,
Too expensive.
Instead she buys him a Hallmark card, signed in sarcastic X’s and O’s.
He said he’d be there.
But the only thing she can depend on him for
Are the wrapped business apologies he brings back

every two or three weeks.
He thinks these expensive gifts replace him,
But despite his ignorance, she understands
The worthlessness of such things.




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i love this so much!

on Sep. 9 2014 at 7:47 pm
Savannainthesky GOLD, West Suffield, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"It may have been in pieces.. but I gave you the best of me"-Jim Morrison(the doors)

Very well written. Beautiful. I find I can relate. Congrats

LauraBora said...
on Jun. 21 2009 at 5:59 am
I like the idea of beginning with the anecdote to introduce the theme. I found the syntax inconsistant, though. Some things seem forced into prose rather than being kept as a sentence. Things like "wants a framed prom photo" could be made a full sentance. The last stanza doenot need to be so straightforward. The meaning should be more implicit and still reflect the anecotal tone established in the beginning. An analysis is not needed. "He thinks these expensive gifts replace him" is a little generic. Perhaps do that a bit more figuratively.


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