The Dead Girl. MAG

March 20, 2009
By Courtney Billow BRONZE, Richfield, Pennsylvania
Courtney Billow BRONZE, Richfield, Pennsylvania
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I found the dead girl in a lake
while wandering a field
I watched the crows circle around
but somehow I could feel.

I saw her lying near the edge
to no fault of her own.
And walking nearer helped me see
that which I did not know.

I wanted to reach out to her
and grab her by the soul.
I wanted to hold on to her,
I dare not let her go.

I feel she’s lost so much, but if
I help her then she’ll see
the truth behind love in this life
and how real this love can be.

But someone’s let her down before.
Someone has let her fall.
And if her soul cannot find rest,
I fear she’ll lose it all.

Between my pity and her pain
she told me something true.
She feels that she’s lost everything
with nothing left to lose.

I’ve studied more intently, finding
fate’s no more than luck.
Just a gamble of “which way”
Does it deserve such trust?

Finally, I’ve found the nerve
to cradle up her soul
and send it flying far, far up
to the place I’ll never know.


The author's comments:
I was watching a movie. And suddenly I had THE urge....

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on Nov. 9 2009 at 4:59 pm
apgirl94 SILVER, Allen Park, Michigan
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Beautiful! i love the emotion great job :)

on Nov. 7 2009 at 12:13 pm
IsobelFree DIAMOND, Hamilton, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"As long as there is open road, the familiar has the most formidable competitor." - Anonymous

haha THE urge, I know that feeling. I love it. It's so rhythmic (well, duh), almost like a song, and the words are incredible. Keep it up!

on Aug. 28 2009 at 11:45 pm
RadioShower PLATINUM, Rio Rancho, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
Emo is imaginary - Gerard Way
Normalness leads to sadness -Phil Lester (AmazingPhil)

kind werid but what the heck you got talent!! not that meny can write poetry like that!!!GO YOU!!!

on Aug. 24 2009 at 4:07 pm
~!@Kali@!~ BRONZE, Vilonia, Arkansas
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Absolutly amazing!! Keep Writing!!! :D

on Aug. 23 2009 at 5:31 pm
Shay1903 BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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This was GREAT. :) Good job. Kudos.

bridget :) said...
on Aug. 18 2009 at 11:03 pm
niice poem i i i love it XD its awesome!!!

on Aug. 6 2009 at 9:54 pm
that was cool. and sweet it was beautiful. it really touched me

on Jul. 26 2009 at 1:55 am
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
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o my gosh that was so beautiful.

hcosmob SILVER said...
on Jul. 22 2009 at 5:28 pm
hcosmob SILVER, Sedona, Arizona
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beautiful =]

on Jul. 6 2009 at 4:56 pm
FashionGuru DIAMOND, Manhattan, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"I don't do fashion, I am fashion." -Coco Chanel

Your poem is so raw and real. I completely feel what you're saying and i know that urge to write. Haha keep writing, your poem is fantastic. Love the rhyming.

on Jun. 29 2009 at 5:03 pm
Vindictive_Love BRONZE, Abq, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
Talent wins games, but teamwork and intelligence wins championships.
Michael Jordan

Whatever you do in life, will be insignificant, but it's very important that you do it.
Mahatma Ghandi

wow that was really deep. keep writing cuz that was really awesome!!!

PnO4eva said...
on Jun. 25 2009 at 9:14 pm
wow...this poem is deep i like it alot!...keep it up its really gewd!!

on Jun. 22 2009 at 6:30 am
NativeWriter GOLD, Santa Rosa, California
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it shows true passion for ones bidding yet the fear of loss or pain is so gripping yet if one see ones anguish let thy fly to thys endin is not to find a brite light shining but to see ones soul transend into an animal to find ones happy eneding

on Jun. 21 2009 at 6:06 pm
cmoney1994 PLATINUM, Newark, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Be the best you an be as you can see i try to be by writing poetry.

I love this poem Keep it Up check my poem called Marriage.

on Jun. 20 2009 at 4:01 am
write4life GOLD, Macon, Georgia
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this is extraordinary. absolutely incredible!!

on Jun. 20 2009 at 12:50 am
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

This is very good. I like how the words rhyme perfectly with each other.

on Jun. 19 2009 at 4:11 am
shelby_kat DIAMOND, Warren, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"I can sum up everything I've learned about life in three words; it goes on." -Robert Frost

i loved your poem, it moved my soul. when my poems approve read some. some of mine are like yours in the way that u can see the unseeable...

Schubster said...
on Jun. 19 2009 at 1:24 am
I know what you mean....I have poem urges too, sometimes. Yours was really great this time! I hope to see more of your writing. :)

on Jun. 17 2009 at 9:42 pm
Hay_Wire PLATINUM, Independence, Missouri
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ahhh.. the urge to write.. sometimes it attacks at the worst moment. great poem. loved it.


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