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January 18, 2009
By Callie Rhodes, Tuscaloosa, AL

I did not listen to my friends,
Though they were old and wise,
For I had love inside my heart
And stars in front of my eyes.

They told me he would be untrue
And that he was no good,
But I told them they were wrong,
As any girlfriend would.

They knew that he was playing games
And toying with my heart,
But I was sure that he was true,
For I wasn’t very smart.

I should have listened to my friends,
For now I am bereft;
He set his sights on a fairer maid,
And then just up and left.

My friends were right and I was wrong,
But I must reap what I have sown.
I closed my eyes and plugged my ears,
And I was left alone.

© Ariel G., Moses Lake, WA

The author's comments:
This is the first poem I had written in years and was the first of several that are written in the style of Dorothy Parker, one of my favorite authors.
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Melancholy.Musings.of.a.Silly.Girl. PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 29 2013 at 3:37 am
Melancholy.Musings.of.a.Silly.Girl. PLATINUM, Islamabad, Other
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Very very relatable!! It just reminds you that everyone goes through this and we really are not that alone. 
ElizabethClarke BRONZE said...
on Sep. 21 2011 at 8:38 pm
ElizabethClarke BRONZE, Thornhill, Other
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Wow, I love your poem, major goosebumps, especially the last line "and I was left alone"! Beautiful and it rhymes delightfully!
Twinny said...
on Apr. 6 2011 at 12:44 pm
i liked this poem alot because it had great rhyming&&anyone can relate to it:)
heartstodust SILVER said...
on Jan. 1 2011 at 1:50 pm
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wow this took be back i know how it feels loved the poem keep writing.
ars360 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 6 2010 at 11:10 am
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This poem has a nice flow. I can relate to when you said, "I should have listened to my friends," because I felt that I could do what I want and not take anyone's advice. Now, like I should have listened to my friend. To make your poem better, you should have some similes or add more imagery.
Angel of music said...
on Feb. 4 2010 at 3:48 pm
I loved the way it flowed and I can also relate to similar situations. Although, now I've been through so many breakups and alot of heartbreak so I think of tears as a waste of my time. Even though I cry a lot. I really hope that you continue to write because that poem was truly moving.
jacked_up_sharpie GOLD said...
on Jan. 21 2010 at 5:35 pm
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I like this a lot, but i think you shouldn't say "Friends" as much as you did. like it a lot though.
Inkspired PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 8 2009 at 8:06 pm
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Wonderful. Just flows and shows your emotions- I think everyone has felt that.
BreathOfFreshAir BRONZE said...
on Aug. 9 2009 at 12:26 am
BreathOfFreshAir BRONZE, Fresno, California
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Poetry can be beautiful without many metaphors if done right, and you proved that. Great work.
xalwaysxbrokenx BRONZE said...
on Aug. 1 2009 at 2:39 pm
xalwaysxbrokenx BRONZE, Middletown, Delaware
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i loved it. same thing happened to me : /
MariaMarie DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 30 2009 at 6:47 pm
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Different.. i like it!
Pink_Butterfly said...
on Jul. 25 2009 at 6:57 pm
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I loved this, very nice. !
ElizNieves PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 25 2009 at 4:39 pm
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Nicely done! :)
icguf615 BRONZE said...
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beautiful. maybe more room for metaphors/similes?

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