Advice This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

January 18, 2009
I did not listen to my friends,
Though they were old and wise,
For I had love inside my heart
And stars in front of my eyes.

They told me he would be untrue
And that he was no good,
But I told them they were wrong,
As any girlfriend would.

They knew that he was playing games
And toying with my heart,
But I was sure that he was true,
For I wasn’t very smart.

I should have listened to my friends,
For now I am bereft;
He set his sights on a fairer maid,
And then just up and left.

My friends were right and I was wrong,
But I must reap what I have sown.
I closed my eyes and plugged my ears,
And I was left alone.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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The.House.Of.Heartbreak. said...
Jul. 29, 2013 at 3:37 am
Very very relatable!! It just reminds you that everyone goes through this and we really are not that alone. 
ElizabethClarke said...
Sept. 21, 2011 at 8:38 pm
Wow, I love your poem, major goosebumps, especially the last line "and I was left alone"! Beautiful and it rhymes delightfully!
Twinny said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:44 pm
i liked this poem alot because it had great rhyming&&anyone can relate to it:)
broken-dreams said...
Jan. 1, 2011 at 1:50 pm
wow this took be back i know how it feels loved the poem keep writing.
ars306 said...
Dec. 6, 2010 at 11:10 am
This poem has a nice flow. I can relate to when you said, "I should have listened to my friends," because I felt that I could do what I want and not take anyone's advice. Now, like I should have listened to my friend. To make your poem better, you should have some similes or add more imagery.
Angel of music said...
Feb. 4, 2010 at 3:48 pm
I loved the way it flowed and I can also relate to similar situations. Although, now I've been through so many breakups and alot of heartbreak so I think of tears as a waste of my time. Even though I cry a lot. I really hope that you continue to write because that poem was truly moving.
jacked_up_sharpie said...
Jan. 21, 2010 at 5:35 pm
I like this a lot, but i think you shouldn't say "Friends" as much as you did. like it a lot though.
Inkspired said...
Sept. 8, 2009 at 8:06 pm
Wonderful. Just flows and shows your emotions- I think everyone has felt that.
BreathOfFreshAir said...
Aug. 9, 2009 at 12:26 am
Poetry can be beautiful without many metaphors if done right, and you proved that. Great work.
kara P. said...
Aug. 1, 2009 at 2:39 pm
i loved it. same thing happened to me : /
MariaMarie This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 30, 2009 at 6:47 pm
Different.. i like it!
Brittany=) said...
Jul. 25, 2009 at 6:57 pm
I loved this, very nice. !
Liz_N said...
Jul. 25, 2009 at 4:39 pm
Nicely done! :)
Samantha G. said...
Jul. 22, 2009 at 4:22 pm
beautiful. maybe more room for metaphors/similes?
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