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January 18, 2009
By Callie Rhodes, Tuscaloosa, AL

I did not listen to my friends,
Though they were old and wise,
For I had love inside my heart
And stars in front of my eyes.

They told me he would be untrue
And that he was no good,
But I told them they were wrong,
As any girlfriend would.

They knew that he was playing games
And toying with my heart,
But I was sure that he was true,
For I wasn’t very smart.

I should have listened to my friends,
For now I am bereft;
He set his sights on a fairer maid,
And then just up and left.

My friends were right and I was wrong,
But I must reap what I have sown.
I closed my eyes and plugged my ears,
And I was left alone.


The author's comments:
This is the first poem I had written in years and was the first of several that are written in the style of Dorothy Parker, one of my favorite authors.

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on Jul. 29 2013 at 3:37 am
Melancholy.Musings.of.a.Silly.Girl. PLATINUM, Islamabad, Other
21 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I tell you that there are terrible temptations that it requires strength, strength and courage, to yeild to."- Oscar Wilde, An Ideal Husband.

Very very relatable!! It just reminds you that everyone goes through this and we really are not that alone. 

on Sep. 21 2011 at 8:38 pm
ElizabethClarke BRONZE, Thornhill, Other
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Wow, I love your poem, major goosebumps, especially the last line "and I was left alone"! Beautiful and it rhymes delightfully!

Twinny said...
on Apr. 6 2011 at 12:44 pm
i liked this poem alot because it had great rhyming&&anyone can relate to it:)

on Jan. 1 2011 at 1:50 pm
heartstodust SILVER, Edinburg, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"i rather feel pain than nothing at all"- three days grace

"im tired of acting like everythings ok
my tears are starting to show
and my smile is fading away"

"I rather be hated for everything i am than to be loved for something that i can't"

wow this took be back i know how it feels loved the poem keep writing.

ars360 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 6 2010 at 11:10 am
ars360 BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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This poem has a nice flow. I can relate to when you said, "I should have listened to my friends," because I felt that I could do what I want and not take anyone's advice. Now, like I should have listened to my friend. To make your poem better, you should have some similes or add more imagery.

on Feb. 4 2010 at 3:48 pm
I loved the way it flowed and I can also relate to similar situations. Although, now I've been through so many breakups and alot of heartbreak so I think of tears as a waste of my time. Even though I cry a lot. I really hope that you continue to write because that poem was truly moving.

on Jan. 21 2010 at 5:35 pm
jacked_up_sharpie GOLD, Fort Worth, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Talk when you are angry, and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret."

I like this a lot, but i think you shouldn't say "Friends" as much as you did. like it a lot though.

on Sep. 8 2009 at 8:06 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

Wonderful. Just flows and shows your emotions- I think everyone has felt that.

on Aug. 9 2009 at 12:26 am
BreathOfFreshAir BRONZE, Fresno, California
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Poetry can be beautiful without many metaphors if done right, and you proved that. Great work.

on Aug. 1 2009 at 2:39 pm
xalwaysxbrokenx BRONZE, Middletown, Delaware
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i loved it. same thing happened to me : /

on Jul. 30 2009 at 6:47 pm
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's a mountain on a beach"-Unknown
"Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It's remarkable how often those two traits coincide."-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

Different.. i like it!

on Jul. 25 2009 at 6:57 pm
Pink_Butterfly, FC, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Never say there is nothing beautiful in the world anymore. There is always something to make wonder in the shape of a tree, the trembling of a leaf."
- Albert Schweitzer.

I loved this, very nice. !

on Jul. 25 2009 at 4:39 pm
ElizNieves PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
36 articles 13 photos 49 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's funny. Don't ever tell anybody anything. If you do, you start missing everybody." The Catcher in the Rye

Nicely done! :)

on Jul. 22 2009 at 4:22 pm
icguf615 BRONZE, Mission Viejo, California
4 articles 0 photos 35 comments
beautiful. maybe more room for metaphors/similes?


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