Hate MAG

January 11, 2009
By GretaRose SILVER, Brookfield, Wisconsin
GretaRose SILVER, Brookfield, Wisconsin
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The hate that ran from his lips
Nearly knocked me unconscious.
His words ripped through my heart
Everyone saw it.

Twenty-seven sets of eyes burned me,
Confused stares closing in,
The room began to shrink.
What was happening?

I shakily inhaled
And knew I had to run
My tears hit the floor
And then I was gone.

Heat radiated through my face
My eyes were on fire
The tears hoped to cool them
But the fire was too wild

My lungs begged for air
But something resisted
The short panicky breathing
Made me feel dizzy

Sudden fatigue consumed me
The cool bathroom wall
Prevented me from falling

I’ve gotten it together
But makeup streaked my face
My cheeks still burned red
As I quietly walked away.



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on Nov. 14 2017 at 1:04 pm
Breezette DIAMOND, Uniontown, Arkansas
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Favorite Quote:
Every Time I even think of you, all those bad memories just fade away, 'cause your smile's enough, you're enough...

Well, Actually, it depends on your way of saying, "face" and "away" and the others, not everything has to be as proper as, say, "Meet,and sleet". But yeah, I thought it was amazing and very, Very, meaningful.

on Apr. 7 2016 at 8:51 pm
TheAmatuerOne BRONZE, Bronx, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"We are all worth millions of planets and stars and galaxies and universes" - River Phoenix

This is really deep I love it

on May. 7 2014 at 6:52 pm
Kat_Poetry BRONZE, Neenah, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"But without the dark, we would never see the stars"

I love the idea behind this poem, it truelly is very deep. However, unless it is intended to be verbal poetry the rhyming scheme didn't really work. Words like "resisted" and "dizzy" or "face" and "away" don't really rhyme and overall it made the poem somewhat difficult to read and hurt the flow. The ideas are there though, to make it flow better in the future I would just tidy up the rhyming scheme.

on Sep. 26 2013 at 3:14 pm
daRklovelyblue17 GOLD, Phoenix, Arizona
13 articles 2 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Where words fail, music speaks."

"I'm trying to believe in things that I don't know[...]That love can kill the pain, that truth is never vain, it turns strangers into lovers, and enemies to brothers"

I love this so much, it's so honest and intense. I'd love to know what you think of my poems, so if you have time you should let me know :)

Ellodan BRONZE said...
on May. 15 2013 at 1:39 pm
Ellodan BRONZE, Tifton, Georgia
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Nice! Doing a good job! 

MMOON PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 29 2013 at 12:28 pm
MMOON PLATINUM, Bellingham, Washington
26 articles 1 photo 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sop being afriad of what could go wrong. Start being positive about what could go right"
I also have another "Loving someone is like hugging a cactus. The harder you hold the more it hurts"

WOW!!! I love this poem. Very shocking and just a very strong poem.

on Mar. 30 2012 at 9:42 pm
Zoe-22-Turner DIAMOND, Beverly, Massachusetts
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wow... i was thinking the same thing as i read this as you were when you wrote this... what i mean is i feel exactly the same! i love the way you displayed your emotions

~Your Words Are Beautiful!!!


on Dec. 16 2011 at 4:34 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Wow pretty intense emotions running through these lines~

on Nov. 24 2011 at 5:18 pm
RaveFire PLATINUM, Vancouver, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes You Have To Give Up Your Life To Save It." ~some book that i don't remember the name of

"Live Life Like There's No Yesterday" ~ random billboard

"If No One Can Hurt You, Then Nobody Loves You" ` ~ Kerli?

wow. gave me chills.

on Sep. 19 2011 at 8:02 pm
LovingTheHaters, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
my mind loves you but my heart doesnt
never say never because it will end up coming to reality
the same thing that makes you laugh will make you cry

this poem was deep...i agree with you

on Aug. 28 2011 at 6:59 am
Mr.Indescribable SILVER, Cerro Gordo, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Hard work beats talent when talent doesnt work hard-Kevin Durant
Pressure Makes Diamonds-Kendall Marshall
Jumping to conclusions just makes the fall a lot harder-Me

Wow. This is really deep and you put your emotions into it really well. Very good! Hey can anbody read mine. Im just starting out.

on Dec. 9 2010 at 11:21 am
starsandotherthings BRONZE, Grand Isle, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
" To be old and wise, you must first be young and stupid" "Paper is more patient than man"

this is like.... DEEP to the core. while i was reading it i felt thethrobbing in myheart. u put so much emotion into it... i felt like i was u. KEEP WITING

soccerbabe36 said...
on Dec. 2 2010 at 9:59 pm
wow, i know exactly how you feel. the same thing has happened to me before. very good and i love the emotion you put into this. 

on Aug. 13 2010 at 10:38 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

wow, did this actually happen? so sry, bu this is some great stuff... read some of mine?

on Feb. 4 2010 at 3:40 pm
I loved it, so sad and deep. It makes me feel as you probably felt. I've been in many similar situations. Keep writing.

kanobby said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 5:49 pm
wows this is like really really deep. i love how its written. it makes u feel wut u were feelinq. it just makes u wonder. really great poem i love it

5estellas n well deserved

KittyMaiden said...
on Jan. 13 2010 at 1:58 pm
Potent. I love the flow of it!

on Jan. 10 2010 at 10:12 pm
Lollipop2012 SILVER, Las Veags, Nevada
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omg!! this poem is amazing!! i love it and i know exactly how it feels. keep up the good work

on Aug. 15 2009 at 5:18 am
JacintaT BRONZE, Brisbane, Other
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I'm suprised.. I thought there would be alot of comments on this poem. I love how it almost makes the reader feel like they're there and let them feel exactly what it's like. Very deep poem, and very cleverly done too. 5stars.

on Aug. 13 2009 at 2:26 pm
Electricity PLATINUM, Bradenton, Florida
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wow great poem. I can feel the hurt




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