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The hate that ran from his lips
Nearly knocked me unconscious.
His words ripped through my heart
Everyone saw it.

Twenty-seven sets of eyes burned me,
Confused stares closing in,
The room began to shrink.
What was happening?

I shakily inhaled
And knew I had to run
My tears hit the floor
And then I was gone.

Heat radiated through my face
My eyes were on fire
The tears hoped to cool them
But the fire was too wild

My lungs begged for air
But something resisted
The short panicky breathing
Made me feel dizzy

Sudden fatigue consumed me
The cool bathroom wall
Prevented me from falling

I’ve gotten it together
But makeup streaked my face
My cheeks still burned red
As I quietly walked away.

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Kat_PoetryThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 7 at 6:52 pm:
I love the idea behind this poem, it truelly is very deep. However, unless it is intended to be verbal poetry the rhyming scheme didn't really work. Words like "resisted" and "dizzy" or "face" and "away" don't really rhyme and overall it made the poem somewhat difficult to read and hurt the flow. The ideas are there though, to make it flow better in the future I would just tidy up the rhyming scheme.
 
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daRklovelyblue17 said...
Sept. 26, 2013 at 3:14 pm:
I love this so much, it's so honest and intense. I'd love to know what you think of my poems, so if you have time you should let me know :)
 
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Ellodan said...
May 15, 2013 at 1:39 pm:
Nice! Doing a good job! 
 
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MMOON said...
Mar. 29, 2013 at 12:28 pm:
WOW!!! I love this poem. Very shocking and just a very strong poem.
 
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LilZo11 said...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 9:42 pm:

wow... i was thinking the same thing as i read this as you were when you wrote this... what i mean is i feel exactly the same! i love the way you displayed your emotions

~Your Words Are Beautiful!!!

 
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beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 16, 2011 at 4:34 pm:
Wow pretty intense emotions running through these lines~
 
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LivingMYLife said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 5:18 pm:
wow. gave me chills.
 
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CarolinaBoy23 said...
Aug. 28, 2011 at 6:59 am:
Wow. This is really deep and you put your emotions into it really well. Very good! Hey can anbody read mine. Im just starting out.
 
Kerra replied...
Sept. 19, 2011 at 8:02 pm :
this poem was deep...i agree with you
 
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starsandotherthings said...
Dec. 9, 2010 at 11:21 am:
this is like.... DEEP to the core. while i was reading it i felt thethrobbing in myheart. u put so much emotion into it... i felt like i was u. KEEP WITING
 
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soccerbabe36 said...
Dec. 2, 2010 at 9:59 pm:
wow, i know exactly how you feel. the same thing has happened to me before. very good and i love the emotion you put into this. 
 
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Marlyre This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 13, 2010 at 10:38 pm:
wow, did this actually happen? so sry, bu this is some great stuff... read some of mine?
 
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Angel of music said...
Feb. 4, 2010 at 3:40 pm:
I loved it, so sad and deep. It makes me feel as you probably felt. I've been in many similar situations. Keep writing.
 
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kanobby said...
Jan. 25, 2010 at 5:49 pm:
wows this is like really really deep. i love how its written. it makes u feel wut u were feelinq. it just makes u wonder. really great poem i love it
5estellas n well deserved
 
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KittyMaiden said...
Jan. 13, 2010 at 1:58 pm:
Potent. I love the flow of it!
 
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Lollipop said...
Jan. 10, 2010 at 10:12 pm:
omg!! this poem is amazing!! i love it and i know exactly how it feels. keep up the good work
 
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Electricity This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 13, 2009 at 2:26 pm:
wow great poem. I can feel the hurt
 
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JacintaT said...
Aug. 15, 2009 at 5:18 am:
I'm suprised.. I thought there would be alot of comments on this poem. I love how it almost makes the reader feel like they're there and let them feel exactly what it's like. Very deep poem, and very cleverly done too. 5stars.
 
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