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Ballad of Autumn

October 11, 2014
By Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks


Hay bale pyramids

and cotton sweaters

Picking a Pumpkin

Writing letters

Pillow forts and

masquerades

A playground for witches

and candy trades

 

Leaf ridden paths

gold as can be

skeleton bones

up in a tree

Thick woolen tights

boots up to here

Oh Autumn

what a sweet time of year

 

Auburn smells

and branches strewn

I dance on gravel

look at the moon

Nothing warmer

as tart apple cider

tangible taste

feeling much lighter

The tricks we play

and boos we get

oh great jokes

made of wit

 

I want to stay

among my dreams

but fall isn't

made of seams



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on Oct. 23 2016 at 10:20 am
AJAY.UNIYAL SILVER, Dehradun, Other
5 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
IT doesn't matte how you start, but it matters how you finish

nice poem ........... keep it up

on Nov. 13 2014 at 5:06 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Thanks so much! I love critisism, it helps me, so I don't mind at all. :) The last line means that I want Fall to last forever, but you can buy or keep Fall like you can with other things, in other words, it isn't substantial. I hope that makes a little sense lol. I'll try to rearrange that play and taste thing, I was iffy on that one, so thank you for pointing it out :)

on Nov. 13 2014 at 10:31 am
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 860 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Awesome, awesome imagery. I love the rhymes too! Also, the shortness of each line sort of gives it... A crisp feel in your mouth. Crisp like fall. (Was that on purpose? I don't even know, but awesome anyway.) But honestly, I read it in my head and now my lips are itching to read it out loud. The only rhyme that's a little weird is play and taste... They're a little bit un-rhymey and there's probably something else you can find to replace it. What does the last line mean exactly? I'm having trouble understanding it. Anyway, overall really adorable. Sorry if I seemed a little critical; I just get excited when I see something with potential. (: I love the whole idea of this... You should make one for each season. Thank you for writing!

on Nov. 11 2014 at 7:02 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Thanks Nelly! I really appreciate your comment :)

on Nov. 11 2014 at 5:30 pm
Nelly_Nell GOLD, Bakersfield, California
11 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
'' For every dark night there is an even brighter day"








-Tupac Shukar

This poem is absolutly amazing. I love the imagery you put into it. Great job Liv. keep it up!!!!!! :)

on Nov. 11 2014 at 5:17 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Thanks a ton! I love fall soooo much :) I think it needs a whole year just to itself lol Thanks for the comment! :)

on Nov. 11 2014 at 12:08 pm
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
46 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."

Liv. first let me just say that this poem was incredible!! I really loved the imagery and sensory words you used. But I also loved your topic; fall is definitely my favorite season as well ;)

on Nov. 10 2014 at 4:26 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Thanks so so so so much! XD

on Nov. 10 2014 at 4:25 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Thank you so much! I think I will :)

on Nov. 10 2014 at 3:53 pm
teacuppoetry GOLD, Lancashire, Other
15 articles 1 photo 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
The world is full of obvious things which nobody by any chance ever observes- Sherlock Holmes

This poem was very creative and has wonderful imagery! Keep it up :)

on Nov. 9 2014 at 11:56 pm
Shahrier PLATINUM, Colma, California
28 articles 10 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm a river that no longer flows" - a friend
"when the people lead, leaders follow" - Gandhi

this was actually really sweet and sunny. simple yet effective. i looked for ways i can critique you, but didnt find anything i didnt like. maybe you can write one about this comming winter too :P

on Nov. 8 2014 at 11:04 am
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Thanks so much! XD

Livii BRONZE said...
on Nov. 8 2014 at 5:21 am
Livii BRONZE, Worrigee, Other
1 article 1 photo 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be yourself; everyone else is already taken
-Oscar Wilde

Really like it! This descibes fall (I call it autumn but whatever) really well. I love the rhyme as well. Really desciptive. Good poem!

on Nov. 2 2014 at 8:50 am
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Haha Thanks! I tried to get the better side of fall captured here :) But the frigid ice sis till there... lol

on Nov. 1 2014 at 3:35 pm
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
29 articles 0 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

I was concentrating on the colder weather fall brings, can't say that anymore. I like this poem.

on Oct. 30 2014 at 5:35 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Thank you so much! I really appreciate your comment :)

dya.o PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 30 2014 at 10:07 am
dya.o PLATINUM, Milton, Florida
43 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If consensus is overrated, I think balance is, too.
I have no interest in living a balanced life.
I want a life of adventure.” | Chris Guillebeau

Wow! Just wow! This absolutely spectacular and really catched the essence of Fall quite beautifully. I love how you describe everything so simply but yet it has a large effect upon the reader. Job well done! You're a wonderful writer!

on Oct. 17 2014 at 1:05 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Haha! I love fall so much, and now we both love it to the point of obsession lol. Thanks for checking this out, it means a lot to me :)

on Oct. 16 2014 at 10:52 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Liv., this is absolutely, amazing! I swear, I believe ya'll are trying to make me fall even more in love with fall. ;) Joshing, haha. But this just did make fall even more in love with fall. Congarts on the editor's choice, my friend! What did I tell you? ;) :) You truly deserve it. You are amazing. You have such a light in you. I love this poem, so much. It's so beautifully and well-written. It makes me want to shout and be a kid. :D Thank you so much, for sharing this, my friend. :) 


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