The Body MAG

December 5, 2008
By L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Is a body unconscious a person still?
No mind is present to govern its deeds.
Does a body have dreams, or a fate to fulfill?
No way to feel it when it bleeds.
Can I be a human, too?
Maybe I’m not even real.
But I am flesh, through and through?
Scratch it up, then let it heal.
Or can a monster have a mind?
An evil thing, or weeping ghost.
Are living and breathing intertwined?
A being punished for its host.
With electrical thoughts, is it ever alive?
Just a skin, an empty shell.
Is the soul really needed for the body to thrive?
A carcass washed up on the shores of hell.



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on Oct. 10 2014 at 1:09 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Wow. This has so much emotion, just so much rawness that it is rather torturing. I don't know when this was published, probably a long time ago, but congrats on having this published! :) You deserv it. You have talent and greatness in you; you're a great and wonderful and talented writer. Thank you so much, for sharing this. :)

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on Nov. 7 2013 at 9:39 pm
im_gail BRONZE, Barrington, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
"these moments will be stories one day"- Perks of Being a Wallflower

i loved this

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on Apr. 28 2013 at 12:03 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

omg i just love this. the rhythm is magic.

Abby96 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 7 2013 at 5:03 pm
Abby96 BRONZE, Leesburg, Virginia
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I love the rhythm to this as well as the fact that you managed to make it rhyme and still sound good. I have nothing against free verse but I love when a poem sounds like a song. I also like the subject. Instead of the usual love/generally depressing poem, you managed to invoke deeper thought. The last two lines were amazing!

on Feb. 5 2013 at 5:03 pm
PirateCountry DIAMOND, Muncie, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve."

ARGH. You've taken all my dreams and made then come true! This is 100% GENIUS. You deserve these compliments! TAKE THEM!

on Jan. 30 2013 at 9:15 pm
TheCylceGoesRound PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
When the rich wage war it's the poor who die.

absolutely, one hundred percent beautiful

on Jan. 12 2013 at 8:19 pm
Anansesem BRONZE, Cave Spring, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"Will our life not be a tunnel between two vague clarities? Or will it not be a clarity between two dark triangles?" ~Pablo Neruda

Beautiful! Heart-wrenching! This better have been printed in TeenInk. I'm about 90% elation and 10% envy because now I've seen the way I aim to write.

TheoBV SILVER said...
on Dec. 25 2012 at 5:49 pm
TheoBV SILVER, Pound Ridge, New York
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My thoughts exactly.

haley69 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 2 2012 at 12:30 pm
haley69 BRONZE, Chesapeake, Virginia
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dito same here

on Oct. 20 2012 at 9:30 am
Lobsterhead BRONZE, Salem, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Walruses are not a toy"

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH THIS IS SO AWESOME!!!!! You're like a cross between Shakespeare and Frost! It's so eerie yet it makes you think....great job! Continue writing! I'm a fan! I look forward to seeing an "L.Neale" book at the library soon!

on Oct. 15 2012 at 11:10 am
NotWriting_Bazinga PLATINUM, Park Rapids, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"She thought in Italics and felt in CAPITALS." Henry James, Jr
"The terrible part is the truth is the only thing you want to hear.... but the last thing you want to admit." Casey Dalton

Such tortured emotion... it makes my soul cry out to you. :') dont stop writing. chekc out my Just an Organ. i think you can relate :)

on Sep. 20 2012 at 2:44 pm
ChrisJ PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Man must evolve for all human conflict a method which rejects revenge, aggression and retaliation. The foundation of such a method is love.”
- Martin Luther King Jr.

This poem was reallY good and made me think. I hope that you continue writing! Perhaps you can read some of my poems such as 'Abused' and 'Floating Spirit'.

Jordan T. said...
on May. 1 2012 at 2:17 pm
Great poem, I really liked it and liked how you used stanzas and verses. I also liked when you used personification with the ghost weeping. All of this figurative language is amazing.

on Jan. 26 2012 at 8:31 am
Quaffle3dg BRONZE, Inman, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Carpe Diem, seize the day boys, make your life extraordinary." -Robin Williams

the first thing i said after i read this poem was WOW nuff said...truely incredible

eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 18 2011 at 9:17 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
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Wow, this poem really blew me away. It's very insightful and poses interesting ideas to chew on. I also loved the way you used rhyme. 

on Nov. 30 2011 at 11:39 pm
RejoiceTheySay... PLATINUM, Topeka, Kansas
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wow. can i meet you? id really like to talk. ha  ha

gleek1234 GOLD said...
on Nov. 17 2011 at 9:42 am
gleek1234 GOLD, Burlington, Vermont
17 articles 0 photos 130 comments

Favorite Quote:
You did let me go you left me broken and heartless, crying out for help, with no one to answer my calls-Shilpa Pierpont-Hale ( poem) Love hurts

This is really good but are you ok?

on Nov. 14 2011 at 7:56 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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very good , i really like it

on Oct. 13 2011 at 11:16 am
JTboiiDrama PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
It is what it is

LOVE IT!!!! I heard Justin Bieber read this too. thats high up you might really get a shoot to go big

on Oct. 4 2011 at 9:05 pm
PiesAreYummy BRONZE, San Pedro Sula, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Hey Patrick, can you hear me? No SpongeBob, it's too dark in here."

I definitely love that the rhymes make sense and aren't nonsense. I could write something that rhymes, but not necessarily it will make sense...5/5


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