Sometimes

April 25, 2014
By WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Sometimes,
I feel like,
My world is left to burn.

Sometimes,
People say that,
They’re so sorry to learn…

Sometimes,
I hate it,
I hate the growing pain.

Sometimes,
I want to,
Just forget and play again.

Sometimes,
I know that,
What my Mum says is right.

Sometimes,
I wish she,
Could make me believe her fight.

Sometimes,
I get so,
Depressed and weaken.

Sometimes,
I cannot reach,
That hopeful beacon.

And sometimes,
Most times,
I can see my disease spread.

And sometimes,
Most times,
I wish that I was dead.

But sometimes,
Other times,
I hope I’ll pull through.

But sometimes,
Other times,
I’ll do it all for you.

Sometimes,
I try desperately,
To laugh, sing and smile.

Sometimes,
I think,
Maybe if I try for a while...

And, finally, sometimes,
I struggle on for,
Me.

And, finally, sometimes,
I’m selfish,
It’s ME.


The author's comments:
I thought of somebody suffering from cancer and their emotional turmoil. Hope you like it.

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on May. 28 2014 at 9:47 am
currently_liddell GOLD, Derry, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
“I can't go back to yesterday because I was a different person then.”
― Lewis Carroll, Alice in Wonderland

Its very emotional I'm not huge on the short stanzas but theyre not bad they almost sound like your tired of pain which might of been your point.

on May. 23 2014 at 7:03 pm
ashlynn17 SILVER, Alice, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Keep calm and swim on.

No problem. It is very good.

on May. 23 2014 at 4:23 pm
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Thank you for being so kind about my work :)

on May. 23 2014 at 3:15 pm
ashlynn17 SILVER, Alice, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Keep calm and swim on.

it's very emotional,and I can easily relate to the meaning behind it. I love that you can word it so gracefully.

on May. 22 2014 at 1:01 pm
mereCat PLATINUM, Horsham, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I am finally colouring inside the lines I live between"

Yeah, I always get things that just come into my head when I'm walking or something :)

on May. 22 2014 at 3:01 am
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Thank you :)

on May. 22 2014 at 2:57 am
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Thanks :) the structure idea just came to me when i was daydreaming but i had to change it a bit

on May. 22 2014 at 2:05 am
mereCat PLATINUM, Horsham, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I am finally colouring inside the lines I live between"

Nice stuff, really origional way of presenting/structuring it (:

on May. 21 2014 at 4:48 pm
Bronwyn-Sophronia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

great job! XD  

on May. 16 2014 at 11:25 am
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Have done :) thanks for the lovely comments btw. made me happy

on May. 16 2014 at 8:12 am
SammHamilton BRONZE, Elmira, New York
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Favorite Quote:
there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in.












-Leonard Cohen

wow i loved it. It is really relatable and i liked the way the stanzas were placed, it caught my eye. though i dont have feedback to give you, i would really appriciate it if you would reveiw my new (and only) book called "The Alliance". i really need some one to help me look for mistakes and im always looking for new ideas and things that can be revised. thanks :)

on May. 6 2014 at 1:53 pm
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Thanks - appreciate it :)

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on May. 6 2014 at 12:35 pm
sneha14 GOLD, Glen Mills, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Becoming fearless isn't the point. That's impossible. It's learning how to control your fear and how to be free from it. That's the point."









- FOUR, DIVERGENT

I loved your poem! It seems to have a deeper meaning than just what appears through words, and that is what helps the reader connect with the poem. 

on May. 5 2014 at 3:08 pm
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Thanks, glad u liked it :) it's the other way round for me, i can only write rhyming poetry and when i do free verse, it just sounds kind of stupid and random

on May. 5 2014 at 12:56 pm
BeatnikLover GOLD, Farson, Wyoming
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Favorite Quote:
"Here growing up means murdering your dreams, cutting your hair, and going to work. All this so you can live in a miserably boring house with a miserably boring family and then be deemed 'successful.'"

I loved to read this and could actually relate to it pretty well. I wish I could give you some feedback, but honestly I'm terrible with poetry and only write free verse or haiku. I just enjoyed reading it. 

on May. 5 2014 at 6:22 am
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Feedback? :)


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