The Loveless Cycle

September 16, 2013
By rokkotothezee GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
rokkotothezee GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
I never sleep, 'cause sleep is the cousin of death


There once was a sad child named Mike Greene,
He lived in a broken home,
His dad was a deadbeat, abusive and obscene,
And his mom made him feel all alone.

One day little Mike came home from school,
To show his Dad what he made,
But his dad didn’t care, he was drunk as a fool,
And for bothering him, Mike paid.

Little Mike became sadder and sadder,
For his Mom didn’t care and his Dad abused him,
His actions in school got badder and badder,
And everything just confused him.

Growing up without love, Mike was filled with fear,
And as he grew up, his classmates felt it,
Mike was mean to the kids but no one would hear,
That Mike could not have helped it.

When surrounded with hate, you are hateful yourself,
Anybody could see this with Mike,
But he became an outcast and never got help,
And drugs began tearing his life.

Then Mike dropped out of tenth grade,
For he hated school worse than his Father,
But it would have been no better if he stayed,
Would someone help him? No one would bother.

Mike worked a nine-to-five in fast food,
And he met a girl with the same situation,
He always was rude, but she was used to it, too,
And she “loved” him without contemplation.

She soon became pregnant and had their first child,
He was born in an old mobile home,
And surely that child would be just as wild,
And like Mike, would feel all alone.

Mike found out his girlfriend had an affair,
And he went into a mad fit of rage,
She tried to explain, but Mike didn’t care,
And his girlfriend quickly was slayed.

Mike thought no one would find out,
But the police quickly arrived,
Mike was sent off to prison no doubt,
But the little child survived.

But what will become of this child?
Could he possibly rise above?
The answer is no, the chances are mild,
For he too will grow up without love.


The author's comments:
This poem is for anyone affected by domestic violence. More broadly, this is for anyone whose parents make them feel alone.

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on Sep. 18 2013 at 11:38 pm
rokkotothezee GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
I never sleep, 'cause sleep is the cousin of death

Thanks!! :D This poem is not actual based on a personal experience, however, I have seen many kids torn apart by this vicious "cycle", so I thought I should write about it. 

on Sep. 18 2013 at 11:15 pm
IrishRed BRONZE, Thayne, Wyoming
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Favorite Quote:
We all bleed the same color!

Very good.   Hits in the right spot.   I know what you went through

on Sep. 18 2013 at 11:10 pm
rokkotothezee GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
I never sleep, 'cause sleep is the cousin of death

Thanks!! :D Yeah, sorry about it being so depressing, I will try to write a cheerier one in the future XD

on Sep. 18 2013 at 10:58 pm
AngelaWithDevilHornsandHalo, Nowhere, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Your best friend and worst enemy are both in this room right now. It's not your neighbor right or left - and it's not God or the devil - it's you.
Edwin Louis Cole

OMG this is soo good! but is really sad too..

on Sep. 18 2013 at 10:16 pm
rokkotothezee GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
I never sleep, 'cause sleep is the cousin of death

Thanks for the feedback!! :D

Kroustona said...
on Sep. 18 2013 at 10:10 pm
Kroustona, Wasilla, Alaska
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Who said I want to fit in ??

Near the end it was a bit choppy but over all I really liked it :) Keep up the good work. 

on Sep. 18 2013 at 10:01 pm
rokkotothezee GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
I never sleep, 'cause sleep is the cousin of death

Thanks! Yeah, I thought about that, the word choice "badder", I was trying to contrast a cheery, even childish tone and rhyme scheme with a very dark subject to create some irony. Thanks for the feedback! :D

Lassie BRONZE said...
on Sep. 18 2013 at 9:56 pm
Lassie BRONZE, Sacramento, California
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Why do today what you can put off until tomorrow?

I like it. There were a few iffy word choices, but you know, creative license and all that. Other than the use of the word 'badder,' it was grammatically correct, and you know, creative license. I liked it. Sad, but you know, ringing of truth. Aw, I made myself sad.

on Sep. 18 2013 at 4:05 pm
rokkotothezee GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
I never sleep, 'cause sleep is the cousin of death

Yeah, I've heard that a lot XD Thanks for the feedback! :D

charles44 said...
on Sep. 18 2013 at 4:03 pm
charles44, Washougal, Washington
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whats up

that is good but depressing

on Sep. 17 2013 at 11:32 pm
rokkotothezee GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
I never sleep, 'cause sleep is the cousin of death

Thanks so much!! :D

on Sep. 17 2013 at 11:07 pm
raymondbvbpaul BRONZE, Sanandreas, California
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Favorite Quote:
Love is a force more formidable than any other. It is invisible- it cannot be seen or measured, yet it is powerful enough to transform you in a moment, and offer you more joy than any other material posesion could.

~Barbara de Angel

i really like this poem. you wrote about a good subject...it deserves more than a 5.

on Sep. 17 2013 at 9:17 pm
rokkotothezee GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
I never sleep, 'cause sleep is the cousin of death

Thank you so much!! :D

on Sep. 17 2013 at 9:16 pm
JustAnotherFairy BRONZE, Guayaquil, Other
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Awesome! It was very emotional and... just great! Hopefully it'll make teens think twice, and then again, -and again- about family values and responsability =)

on Sep. 17 2013 at 9:16 pm
rokkotothezee GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
I never sleep, 'cause sleep is the cousin of death

Yeah, I've heard that a lot, that I made it too hopeless and depressing XD I will make a more hopeful poem in the future though :D Thanks for the feedback!

on Sep. 17 2013 at 9:13 pm
Lyinheart SILVER, Harrisonburg, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Failing isn't just for failures, it's for everybody. Failures just have more experience." - Dan Smith

The poem in itself is beautiful. I can visualize this "mike". I hate how its so depressing though, maybe on the last paragraph give us a little hope for a future? but over all well done!

on Sep. 17 2013 at 9:06 pm
rokkotothezee GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
I never sleep, 'cause sleep is the cousin of death

Thanks! Yeah, I'm sorry it was so depressing XD

lilredd7 said...
on Sep. 17 2013 at 9:04 pm
lovely sad and real  

on Sep. 17 2013 at 8:52 pm
Ms.PeytonLovesHP GOLD, Rancho Cordova, California
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Favorite Quote:
“We are all a little weird and life is a little weird, and when we find someone whose weirdness is compatible with ours, we join up with them and fall in mutual weirdness and call it love.” - Doctor Seuss

Really well drafted and realistic.... but super depressing. That;s okay though, not everything is happy.

on Sep. 17 2013 at 4:07 pm
rokkotothezee GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
I never sleep, 'cause sleep is the cousin of death

Thanks!! :D


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