Heaven and Hell

January 19, 2013
By Winter_Rain SILVER, Lorton, Virginia
Winter_Rain SILVER, Lorton, Virginia
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Being fearless doesn't mean having no fear at all. It just means taking that one thing that scares you out of your pants.......and then doing it anyway.


The gates of heaven
Are pearly white
And the streets
Are paved with gold

Church bells ring
And angels sing
There are many
Young and old

But below that kingdom is an awful place
Where evil spirits roam
A place with lakes and pits of fire
Satan’s wretched home

Within this darkness
Are many sinners
Now ashamed
Of what they’ve done

They cry to the lord
In pain and sorrow
But they’ve got
Nowhere to run

God has promised a home to us
A kingdom where he is king
A home of wonders and love and joy
That ends all suffering

The devil has promised us something too
But it’s really more of a threat
He wants us to become a part of him
A part of eternal death

He wants us to help destroy the world
To throw Jesus to the ground
To become a demon just like him
And drag more people down

We must repent, we must be saved
We ust share our Father’s love
We must push the devil down below
And let our savior rise above



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on Feb. 2 2013 at 12:06 am
Winter_Rain SILVER, Lorton, Virginia
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Being fearless doesn't mean having no fear at all. It just means taking that one thing that scares you out of your pants.......and then doing it anyway.

IfLifeGivesYouLemons, Thanks for your review.  I've always loved writing but I'm kind of new at actually sharing it with the public.  Do you have any tips on how to make my other stories and poems better?

on Jan. 22 2013 at 5:01 pm
IfLifeGivesYouLemons PLATINUM, Sacramento, California
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When I was 5 years old, my mother always told me that happiness was the key to life. When I went to school, they asked me what I wanted to be when I grew up. I wrote down 'happy'. They told me I didn't understand the assignment. I told them they didn't understand life

It's nice to see an actual ballad on here. And it's a nice message, but not as hard-hitting as it really could be. To me, this poem was kind of like prose, but with rhyme and meter. Try to use more poetic methods like figures of speech, vivid imagery, and such to make the message of your poem as vibrant and shocking as it really could be.


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