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Memorable Rain

December 30, 2012
By Hamzawaseem GOLD, Lahore, Other
Hamzawaseem GOLD, Lahore, Other
15 articles 1 photo 144 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The important thing is not to stop questioning." ~Einstein


The whispering of rain,
Delighted my ears,
And I wished I was,
Close to my dears.

My dream came true,
My friend came in blue.
Can't forget those happy moments,
And that cool rain in torrents.


The author's comments:
This poem is based on my true experience at school.

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on Apr. 21 2013 at 11:31 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

That was some really nice imagery! It had rain and friends and the best line "The whispering of rain" that just sort of struck me....Loved this! Keep writing!

on Apr. 20 2013 at 1:57 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

i liked the metaphor a lot in this! the imagery is perfecto love it!! XD

on Apr. 1 2013 at 3:23 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

I really liked it keep it up

EMarie GOLD said...
on Mar. 31 2013 at 4:44 am
EMarie GOLD, Joplin, Missouri
19 articles 7 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
Courage comes in all sizes, but fits only a few.
What is wise is not always right and what is right is not always wise.
Knowing what is wrong and right is not choosing which to fight.
-All of these are by me

I really enjoyed this! I love the rain.

on Mar. 24 2013 at 3:59 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
1 article 0 photos 274 comments

Favorite Quote:
Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

i love how you post true experiences as poems........ and the rhyming is excellent

on Mar. 19 2013 at 12:33 pm
Hannah_Ignatiuk16 BRONZE, Bryant, Arkansas
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments
I loved the layout and it was very passionate  

on Feb. 18 2013 at 1:25 pm
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
31 articles 20 photos 343 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist."
- Oscar Wilde

I love this. Is the frinde coming in blue symbolic for the rain?

on Feb. 15 2013 at 12:42 am
fromtheashes GOLD, ~~~~~, Montana
14 articles 6 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I took the road less traveled, and that has made all the difference"~Robert Frost

oh how beautiful <3

on Jan. 31 2013 at 12:06 am
EnnaGirl SILVER, Sacramento, California
9 articles 2 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be the change you want to see in the world
- Ghandi

this was beautiful!!!!  

on Jan. 17 2013 at 9:40 am
loveshersheys, Lahore, Other
0 articles 2 photos 30 comments
wow! I love this poem. It's very sweet

on Jan. 17 2013 at 9:39 am
loveshersheys, Lahore, Other
0 articles 2 photos 30 comments
wow! I love this poem. Its very sweet.

on Jan. 15 2013 at 2:34 pm
LyricLove SILVER, Webster City, Iowa
6 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't tell me the skies the limit when there are foot prints on the moon."

Very well written!! :)

on Jan. 12 2013 at 12:29 pm
country-cutey GOLD, St.croix Falls, Wisconsin
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont say it if you dont mean it because i might actually belive it

thats very good

on Jan. 11 2013 at 2:20 pm
MonsterGirl2000 SILVER, Des Moines, New Mexico
9 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
When it seems like there’s no one left to run to in this empty world you can come to me I’ll be your shooting star. You can tell me your dreams I can’t promise to make them come true, but I’ll be there to pick up the pieces of your broken heart if your dreams happen to fall through…Unknown

i love te rhyming

on Jan. 11 2013 at 12:41 pm
TrekkieFangirlForLife SILVER, Oceanside, California
5 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
If your not pretty, your beautiful. if ur not beautiful, ur goregous, If ur not gorgeous, u have an unearthly beauty

love it....very sweet.

on Jan. 10 2013 at 7:36 am
Songs_Along GOLD, Abcd, Other
16 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes we are only given a few minutes to be with the one we love and a thousand hours to spend just thinking about them."

wonderful! :D

on Jan. 10 2013 at 12:26 am
SiblingCoC BRONZE, Other City, Other
3 articles 0 photos 7 comments
That was kind of cool

.king. SILVER said...
on Jan. 7 2013 at 11:28 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
9 articles 4 photos 573 comments

Favorite Quote:
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Very good :)!

MysticLady said...
on Jan. 6 2013 at 11:44 pm
MysticLady, Estancia, New Mexico
0 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your limit is what you make it

Rain is my favorite kind of weather so this is really cool. and it represents your loved ones well