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I see him up there,





Legs dangling from the edge,





Trying to look like he has a bad boy edge—





But not today.







Today there are tears streaming down his beautiful face.





They come down like a waterfall,





As if it were a race.





Laced with sadness,





They hit me,





Like they were drops of rain.





I shout up to him,"Come down, I know your pain."






I run up the fire escape,





As if my feet caught on flame.





I'd sit there on that roof top with him as we confess,"We're lame."






I take his hand,





So warm in mine,





And take him some place else.





"Everything will be fine."





I tell him,





As I place my hand on his scars,





The ones on his back,





And the ones his dad gave him with his cigars.






"Rose and I had a fight, I can't smile like some do."





"Yes you can." I take his hand "Because I love you."






This is what I would do,





If I could stop you,





On that one horrid day.





You've moved on and away from me,





When you passed away.





I miss you so much,





My dearest friend,





In every single way.



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DanielM said...
Jul. 23, 2012 at 11:14 am:
Wow.....is all I got to say. This was so sad. Great emotion. I liked the beginning. Suggestion: you should write more poem and add more imagery
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 23, 2012 at 11:18 am :
Thanks Daniel, I will try and add more imagery and I will never stop writing :) 
 
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hippiechick99 said...
Jul. 23, 2012 at 9:15 am:
I love this poem. It's so sad, but it captures the essence of love perfectly. I like how it was lain out, but the words... Oh my goodness, the words are amazing. I started crying about halfway through. You accomplished everything I love in a poem, keep writing :)
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 23, 2012 at 10:11 am :
Thank you so much, I'm sorry for the tears, yet again, but I really did love him a lot.
 
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Carlaisthebest said...
Jul. 23, 2012 at 9:05 am:

Really very sad and touching.....

:(

 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 23, 2012 at 9:08 am :
Thank you, I'm sorry for making you sad at 9:00 TI time :)
 
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Always.Attract said...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 5:52 pm:
Lexa...You made me cry... Very good Poem. Love you - Jojo
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 5:55 pm :
I'm sorry I made you cry Jo, this is a pretty hard piece of work to read outloud without crying. I read it during writing camp and I got a few tears from my face and others. 
 
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nakubaraThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 5:50 pm:
My condlences, amazing piece.
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 5:52 pm :
Thank you very much, the spacing got somewhat messed up. 
 
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PrinceAlex said...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 9:32 am:
RIP Leo, I love you. If I had that writing skill I would, maybe I'll draw something up for you. Much love, Alex.
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 9:35 am :
Thanks Alex. Didn't know you were on this site, but you draw away :P I miss him so much, you should do one for Rosie. 
 
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Prince Alex said...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 9:16 am:
This is intense. RIP Leo, love you bro.
 
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Mr. K. said...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 9:14 am:
Triumph, this is intense, thank you for the Monday morning tears.
 
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Silver2blackThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 9:05 am:
what was it ??!?! 
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 9:09 am :
My friend committed su.ic.ide last year and this is about how much I miss him and what I would do if I could stop him. RIP
 
Lady_Lemon replied...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 7:30 pm :

TRIUMPH WHY DID YOU MAKE ME READ SOMETHING SO SAD?!?!?!?!?!?! *wipes away tears* Great peice, and I hope it gave you some closure, something very difficult to come by when something so tragic happens.

 

Sometime, life is a b!tch, but we have to keep trying. But then, the day comes when trying is no longer an option. Bad things happen to good people, while all those bad people live without a care in the world, everything working for them. Sometimes it is difficult to underst... (more »)

 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 7:43 pm :
Lemon, that was the most beautiful comment I have ever read. And yes, it is probably best that he departed from us, I still let my tears roll down my face for him, because he was and is one of my best friends. I hope that he's somewhere safe. Sorry for making you read something so horrid, thanks though :)
 
Lady_Lemon replied...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 7:45 pm :
Horrid is not how I would describe it at all! It was beautiful, it just made me really sad :'( 
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 8:09 pm :
I'm sorry! Someone told me I made them cry over chat :'(
 
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