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I see him up there,





Legs dangling from the edge,





Trying to look like he has a bad boy edge—





But not today.







Today there are tears streaming down his beautiful face.





They come down like a waterfall,





As if it were a race.





Laced with sadness,





They hit me,





Like they were drops of rain.





I shout up to him,"Come down, I know your pain."






I run up the fire escape,





As if my feet caught on flame.





I'd sit there on that roof top with him as we confess,"We're lame."






I take his hand,





So warm in mine,





And take him some place else.





"Everything will be fine."





I tell him,





As I place my hand on his scars,





The ones on his back,





And the ones his dad gave him with his cigars.






"Rose and I had a fight, I can't smile like some do."





"Yes you can." I take his hand "Because I love you."






This is what I would do,





If I could stop you,





On that one horrid day.





You've moved on and away from me,





When you passed away.





I miss you so much,





My dearest friend,





In every single way.




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IndigoAngelThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 2, 2013 at 2:36 pm:
This reminds me so much of my big brother, I think this is beautiful and I absolutely love it.
 
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Allicat001 said...
Jul. 27, 2012 at 7:09 pm:
So sad, and so tragic, yet so moving and beautiful, flawless job.
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 27, 2012 at 9:15 pm :
Thanks a bunch, it really was tragic. I wouldn't say flawless though :P
 
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LETangelzFall said...
Jul. 26, 2012 at 10:29 pm:
that was beaughtiful
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 26, 2012 at 10:36 pm :
Thank you, you are beautiful, ^-^
 
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caitiekate said...
Jul. 25, 2012 at 11:58 am:
I agree...very sad! Good job with the rhyme scheme...it worked well with the poem. It was short and sweet to capture that moment. However a little more imagery can never hurt because I was a little confused the first time I read it...I really had to pay attention and read it slow in order to get every detail since they weren't emphasized. But again, a really nice piece! (My school work always end up being good poems too!) haha
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 25, 2012 at 12:41 pm :
Thank you for your feed back, and yes my imagery tends to be very suddle, I will try and work on it in the future.
 
caitiekate replied...
Jul. 25, 2012 at 3:42 pm :
glad i could be of help, but again, great poem!!
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 25, 2012 at 7:26 pm :
Thanks :) I try really hard when it comes to writing. 
 
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Proud_To_Be_An_AmericanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 11:35 pm:
Wow, this is sad. :'(  I hope your friend is in a better place now, and I give my condolences to you and all hurt by his death.  It's a well writen peice though, good job Triumph.
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 11:50 pm :
Thank you, I know he is still watching over my friends and I from a better place.
 
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Hannabug said...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 7:47 pm:

This is so sad and sweet at the same time

 

 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 7:51 pm :
I know, it was an assignment at first, but I took it and I ran with it. The assignment was what would you do if you could turn back time and do over one thing, and I picked saving my friend. 
 
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zoeisdyingtolive said...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 7:31 pm:
This is beautiful.
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 7:37 pm :
Thank you so much :) 
 
zoeisdyingtolive replied...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 11:56 pm :
Anytime c:
 
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CelestaCuffrig said...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 1:20 pm:
You know those tingly feelings you get when you read something genius? I just got those. This is a lovely mixture of poetry, love story, and loss. Beautiful! Check out my work, pretty please? AND KEEP WRITING.
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 7:18 pm :
Thank you immense amounts! I will never stop writing and I will definitely check out your work. I'm sure he would've loved to read that comment!
 
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DanielM said...
Jul. 23, 2012 at 11:14 am:
Wow.....is all I got to say. This was so sad. Great emotion. I liked the beginning. Suggestion: you should write more poem and add more imagery
 
Triumph replied...
Jul. 23, 2012 at 11:18 am :
Thanks Daniel, I will try and add more imagery and I will never stop writing :) 
 
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